My feet worn red raw from each stone thrown
along this path I chose to walk.
Grit and gravel travel trail
of past regret and shame,
it will stay the same;
over these hills,
around these
curves of
life.
Each turn
and each twist,
lurks in the mist,
hoping to wreck me,
but my soul has such drive
that I’ll pursue, that I’ll strive
to cruise this road, wind in my hair,
sun shines on my face, no blame, no fear.
Won’t hide myself, I won’t cower!
I'll trudge with sheer pure power
climb the hills with true pride
and if I falter
or if I fall
I’ll know I
did it
all.
Author notes
-Ink Artist-
Prompt: "life is like a highway"
Form: (Chains Allowed) Nonet; http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/nonet.html
Catch: ALL the words in your poem can be not more then 6 letters long
A contest entry
- Poets Survivor -Top 5 -Round 12 by Ryno.
450 points, ended July 21, 2007, 3 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Amazing write of self assurance and discovery. We are so much stronger than we often give ourselves credit for. To have the ability to realize our flaws, our demons, and face them - knowing that we are the makers of the tide. Loved this one!!!
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happy hoodwinking!
Great work on this piece poet... i loked the imagry that you used in this piece, and want to congratulate you on the maintenance of your form throughout this piece. There wasn't a place where i saw it fail. great work!
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You know I visualize this piece instead of reading it...I could visualize it all happening and that's a goal all poets strive for in every poem they write...can the reader see what is going on instead of just reading a simple poem? And the answer is yes...I saw exactly what happened in this piece...Honestly I didn't find a flow in this piece which isn't that bad because I could see it in my head so there was really no need of a flow...I saw what was going on and I didn't need the words to help guide me...this piece was extremely creative, not many pieces are like this... never have I read a piece like this.....Hands Down Brilliant!!!!!!
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The form was very well written. And there was excellent imagery with in the meaning of this poem. My main issue with it is that it was a little cliche with the ideas in it. I know, I know the prompt I gave you was cliche, lol, I just think you could've been more creative with it. Overall, I though you did an good job with your form and excellent job with your task. Thanks so much
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You've done a great job with your form. I love the way you described the road and the obstacles faced. It was very vivid to my mind's eye--fantastic job.
I really thought your subject matter worked perfectly with your form. The way it lays on the page and the eyes must follow it in oscillating fashion very much mirrors the twists and turns of your winding road.
You could feel the emotion in your piece and the it flowed along quite smoothly. Great job!
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Wonderful form and flow. Your thoughts are deep and captivating. I Loved the style with which you write. The whole piece is fabulous and you've completed another task wonderfully. hugs, Bunny
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I enjoyed your prompt, but am not a great fan of nonets or etherees really ... because I don't write them well
... but you breathed some life and some soul into this form, and offered us a very graceful and wisdom-filled poetic gift here ...
wonderful ...
maa
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Sigh. Wow...outstanding job.
This is one of my favorite forms to read, and the subject of this one in particular really hits home for me. You carried out the metaphor so well, and with a difficult catch. Congrats on doing such a fantastic job - again. 
Best wishes,
~J.
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An amazing write indeed Lori and somehow I felt this came from deep within you. Love this form , one I am bnot familiar with I have to admit!
I loved the way your thoughts travelled along life's 'highway' Written superbly to the prompt!
Wonderful imagery and emotion in this piece.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Gaylene
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Beautifully done Lori, way to stay with the form and it expresses a lot feelings. Keep writing and good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
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You have done another amazing job. There are so many seven letter words I use, I would have never been able to do something this great with that catch. Great job, and good luck.
Chelsea
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This is amazing and I love the form. The flow and imagery are brilliant
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This is as smoothe as glass...the structure, the flow and your words are impeccable...full of hope, spirit and determination...Such strength, felt powerful by the time I was finished...This is one of my fav songs, so glad to read this....Best of Luck...
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