An Albino Rainbow
May be prettier than the rest
Hidden beauty
Hidden pain
We all have something
That needs to be hidden
The beauty of our pain
Slips into seclusion
Leaving us alone
But fully aware
How empty the world can feel
When you seem invisible
One may wonder
How can a rainbow be albino
Simply by being
Something unique
A contest entry
- Closes at 15 entries, Be Inspired By These Set of Words... by Tangled Angle.
420 points, ended July 20, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like this, quite simple, yet that is what makes it so nice. At the same time, kind of falls into the cliche side with the whole rainbow thing, with other objects/metaphors surrounding it you could have made it more original, however you didn't, and that is why it is cliche. Otherwise this was good, and I like it.
originality: 5
creativty: 6
use of devices: 5
title: 3
development: 6
rhyme/line-breaks: 10
length: 8
Flow: 10
Impact: 6
Enjoyment: 8
Total: 67
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