What chance to-day, should Romeo propose
undying love to his fair Juliet?
When seeking her agreement, he’ll compose
prenuptial regulations to be met.
Convinced that should they part, then he’ll be free
to take the lion’s share; regardless brash.
No doubt he’ll make it clear that only he,
dictates how much she’ll get, when sharing cash.
Remedial measures though, from Juliet
may find dear Romeo is somewhat scorned.
No remnant of his planning, you can bet
he'll find, now Juliet’s been warned.
It may transpire she’s master of her charms.
And reading every article at hand,
will not fall easily in suitors arms.
Her rights to-day she knows, and will have planned.
Inviting equal shares may bring disdain,
but modern Juliet will stake her claim.
Author notes
Word bank. All words used: Remedial, Compose, Seemingly, Article, Remnant, Brash, Prenuptial, Inviting, Transpire, Convinced.
In a list
A contest entry
- Word Bank to Greet Your Muse by Tercil.
450 points, ended July 29, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Love Story With A Twist by Venus25.
425 points, ended September 16, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romeo and Juliet by my02U.
480 points, ended December 8, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful!
I like Juliet's point of view. This is exactly what I think about this situation! Thank you for the great poem. Good luck in the contest!
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this is a very interesting take on the prompt - i'm glad you chose to write a modern poem. great write, i loved the rhyme!
luv,
lovey
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Yes!
Hello clever lady!
I am a huge fan of cleverly constructed poems and this is definately that. You took a classic, a masterpiece and spiced it up with your touch and it worked well! I enjoyed very much!
Best of luck
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A word bank sonnet! You are very brave, I like the way your mind works. Purists may not like the fourth quatrain, but I like the equal time you have given to Juliet's side. This is a thoroughly modern Juliet to match her red-tape Romeo. I enjoyed it!
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Prenuptials now are all rage, to protect those assets yet unmade, but since R&J swift ended in the grave… the lawyers fee they might have saved!¡
The bard’s tragedies are like an old folks home – nobody gets out alive!¡
The poem seemed smooth and well worded – like Epi~ I didn’t guess it was written to a list, but I would have liked a little more development of the idea… and perhaps a slightly stronger punch line – but that’s just my taste so…¿?
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The eighteen line Sonnetetet..? Or perhaps it's written in the form of a scene from a Shakespeare play (they often ended with a couplet).
Excellent work from a wordbank - I had no idea until I got to the Author notes.
If you read any lines that you think I would consider reorganized for convenience, you can consider a little extra tweaking, of course, but you've written an excellent contest entry here -- best of luck to you.
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Outstanding
This is a cynical and humourus comment on today's society. The poem is fluid with a subtle rhyme scheme that doesn't jar the ear and reads very naturally, not something that is easy to achieve. A fun poem that is amusing to read. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you. Your comments are most welcome and much appreciated.
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Awesome rhyme! Not many people can rhyme well, so, as you could probably tell, I was enthralled after reading this!
One thing, though: you said this was a sonnet, and while it follows the rhyme scheme and metre of an English sonnet, you have an extra quatrain! Still, I'd not delete one if I were you; that'd wreck this lovely piece.
Great work!
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perfect
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Thank you
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What a lovely narrative, enjoyed the spendour of age old verse and the implentation of soliloquy is enough to make the bard proud.
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