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Raven’s Flight

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W hispers of a silent goodbye
My face pressed on the window glass
She gave the world a touch of class

And all alone I sit and cry

She left us for a place on high
The time has come that she should pass
Whispers of a silent goodbye
My face pressed on the window glass

She heard my heart and tears would dry
She made me smile with a little sass
Passed to the place of greener grass
So now she lives where angels fly
Whispers of a silent goodbye

 

 

 

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Rondel
A French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows:
ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats.

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 21
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    Beautiful.


  • second-born
    October 25, 2007

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    Wow...I was reading on how to write a rondel from shadow poetry...and of course I know that a good example is one of your works...and this one is truly a remarkable one!!! I loved the heartfelt emotions that you've poured to this rondel...you are truly a class of your own!!!


  • Faeryn
    July 26, 2007
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    This is so sad, Amera but very good


  • artisticxpoetry
    July 23, 2007
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    good. I like it


  • sunny day
    July 19, 2007

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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    A beautiful Rondel that you have penned here my dear friend. Sad and filled with emotion it clutches the heart and wrings the tears from it. Flowing softly like a meandering river it was filled with such vivid imagery. There are a few poets here that I just sit and *sigh* in amazement when I read their work and you are most definitely one of them. Thank you for sharing such beauty and elegance in this write with all of us. Best wishes for the contest also. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


  • catz Moderators member
    July 19, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem in memory of your friend. But I'm sending you an IM about it.. please be sure to read it
    Thank you
    Dee


  • Desire gold member
    July 19, 2007

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    Oh My!


    Oh My
    Beautiful Gem of a piece You have penned for one Gem which I am honored to read and get to inhale the words You speak
    Sorry about Your Loss
    Thank You for sharing this Form and also Your
    Friend
    Gorgeous~inside and out!!

    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • ellipsist
    July 17, 2007

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    a beautiful & touching tribute

    you've conveyed sadness & acceptance with such eloquence and the message is rather inspirational to others, as well

    you've composed a beautiful piece and I hoped that this expression helped to bring a little relief to your pain, as others can definitely take away from it positive intimation...


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    July 17, 2007

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    oh, my...I'm so sorry for your loss. This is a beautiful memorial. Wriiten with love and perfection.


  • HaleyMary
    July 17, 2007

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    Beautiful tribute piece. It's always sad when a fellow poet and friend passes on. I liked the third line the best. It makes me think of how some people in this world make the world a little better with their presence here and how much they are missed when they pass on. best of luck in the contest.


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 17, 2007

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    This was a beautiful tribute to a friend, seems a few words can really reach out and touch us! I don't know this poet you speak of, however, your words were quite impacting and have left an imprint Beautiful penning and my pleasure to read ~tia


  • RedAquarius
    July 17, 2007
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  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    July 17, 2007

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    An interesting tribute to a friend we were all just getting to know.

    Your words are full of tearful woe, and will be read by many.

    I am still at a loss to her demise.


  • StarEyes
    July 17, 2007

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    Miss Form Queen......

    How do you do it? This is amazing!!!!! I love this one! What a touching tribute. Best of luck to you in this contest!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    July 17, 2007

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    This is just so beautiful and brings a tear to the heart of this woman...I was just getting to know to her thank you so much for sharing her with me


    • Amera gold member
      July 17, 2007
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      Thanks so much, I knew you'd come here and give me support. She was so good to me.



      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 17, 2007

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    Oh Dollface, a lovely tribute and so glad you wrote this for many reasons... Hopefully she will be remembered in the light you have portrayed for her..well done....I think I love this form...almost as much as I do you...well ok, not that much but you get my point.

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