know this:
i still love
you like the sap
hugs the tree
but everything
goes
especially in
this heat-
i have
evaporated
and it's
all your fault
but no matter
what tree you
cling to
mine will
always have
your name
carved into
it
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Love this, actually. You've taken the name carved into a tree, and made it into a whole new idea.
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awwwww this has to be the most touching write I have read in ages. Such a simple metaphor with so much meaning behind it. Your poetry is a perfect example of 'showing' as opposed to 'telling'.
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I love this!! It's crazy good!!. The way you use your words are great!!! good write..
Peace to you, J. -
I came back to this site just to read your poetry. I won't be doing much on it...commenting mainly on poems is the #1 priority.
The metaphor used was wonderful and I couldn't think of anything better to go with this. It short, but the feelings were there and that's what made it wonderful. Very well penned and beautiful. Wonderful job.
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god, this is absolutely stunning.
i've been studying dendrology (fancy word for the study of trees) for the last three weeks, and i was honestly thinking that i'd really like to read a tree-based poem. & then i stumbled on this.
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My god kevin..*tears* I love you.
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thinking of you
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aww, bahbey!
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This literally made me cry.
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ha i love it =]
it kind o reminds me of a children's rhyme almost because of the simplicity and it's theme is not obscure or vague at all.
With the use of white-space and punctuation, it's alomst seems rather ee cummings-ish.
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yayy for kevin!
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Wow, the metaphor in this is great and very eloquently presented, but this poem does more than that. It's the sweetest and most touching poem I've ever read from you. And it's really brave of you to post something like this online. As a poem, I really like it how you make every single image mean more than a thousand other words could. And the beginning is really special, it sounds personal, reassuring, and bold. Not to mention the title which was very expressive. You really have a way with titles (and generally with writing in fact). This poem sort of reminds me of a conversation we once had and it makes me sad. On one hand I think these kinds of things can help us learn and be better but I know (first hand unfortunately) how hard it is. Sorry for rambling again, but this poem was too good for me to stop myself.
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