Five years together, five years of bliss
Still holding hands, still sharing a kiss
Destination’s secret, a scarf on your eyes
We kiss once more as I drink in your sighs
Isla de fantasías, true loves home
Isla de fantasías, the waves and the foam
Isla de fantasías, loves sweet bower
Isla de fantasías, holds a magical power
Alone on our island we share coconut milk
The sun in your hair turns it to burnished silk
Our love will never be a tropical mirage
As I lay you down to give a long deep massage
Isla de fantasías, true loves home
Isla de fantasías, the waves and the foam
Isla de fantasías, loves sweet bower
Isla de fantasías, holds a magical power
Against tropical heat I use a palm leaf fan
The oil on your body magnifying your tan
Picking you up I carry you over a dune
To bathe you in the waters of the cool lagoon
Isla de fantasías, true loves home
Isla de fantasías, the waves and the foam
Isla de fantasías, loves sweet bower
Isla de fantasías, holds a magical power
We kiss in the water, sharing our heat
Your body so soft, your mouth so sweet
You in my arms, tender and small
I carry you behind the cool waterfall
Isla de fantasías, true loves home
Isla de fantasías, the waves and the foam
Isla de fantasías, loves sweet bower
Isla de fantasías, holds a magical power
We make sweet love, our hearts and bodies melt
The purest love two people have ever felt
You fall asleep, your head on my arm
Knowing I’ll always keep you from harm
Isla de fantasías, true loves home
Isla de fantasías, the waves and the foam
Isla de fantasías, loves sweet bower
Isla de fantasías, holds a magical power
Author notes
This is a challenge poem, based upon the story “Isle of Fantasies” by Master Ktulu - http://allpoetry.com/poem/2818124
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Bravo!!
Bravo friend. I loved this piece. Sooooo sensual and romantic. *sighs* Very well done on this piece. I am so glad we are on the same team
Good luck in this round of the challenge.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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Thanks a lot for the comment
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wow... now that is the most sensual lyrics i have heard in ages... well done on a fantastic piece... good luck with the next part of the challenge..
cheers
Jen
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Thanks a lot Jen,
I have to admit I wasn't too happy with it Myself.
Tatt
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the words and the picture together, this surpasses beautiful. this is romantic and gives one goosebumps.
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Thanks a lot shimmer, glad I could give you some goosebumps
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Beautiful write. I liked how you kept repeating the stanza with the title in it. The poem seemed like it could flow like a song the way it was written. Keep up the great work.
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Thanks Arzab (long time no see!)
The challenge was to write song lyrics
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Your Score
presentation............................19
spelling and puctuation.................20
originality.............................20
how well you handled challenge..........20
overall.................................20
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You have written this to a "T" it is beautiful, romantic and yes still erotic. Magnificent job!
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Thanks a lot for the comment
Glad you liked it.
Tatt
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Tattboy,
What an incredibly sensual, sexy song this is !
This would sound absolutely amazing if it was recorded with the right voice and beat.
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Not sure what beat, most people seem to see this as slow and sensual, I wrote it with Wham's Club Tropicana going through My brain
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Thank you very much for your kind comment
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You do sensual SO well ...
- never stop writing this way 
You have taken a fairytale story and weaved a soothing melody from it
Well done on an exceptional write Master - You truly are a wonderfully gifted writer (among other things )
Forever in Your service,
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Thank you My pet (as you know, I wasn't 100% happy with this).
I'm glad that you liked it though ...
YLM
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