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Second Best

 

 

 

 

A tanned moon fills
the night
and haze, heavy as white rum
slips into his eyes.

 

 

Bottle-green Buick
hiccups into the
driveway, stifles
bodies in quiet affair.

 

She never did like
the sweat of loud
sex.

Brian only knew

 

how to leave, drink
and screw
      


             in no particular order.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

“Never allow someone to be your priority while allowing yourself to be their option”

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  • Cinnarry gold member
    July 22, 2007
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  • JustBreathe gold member
    July 18, 2007

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    Enjoyed the poem ... and I particularly like the quote that inspired you. Good luck in the contest!


  • Cat
    July 17, 2007

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    seems we wrote the same poem today..

    very well done.. i especially like the last line..

    m


    • J.J. Sass
      July 19, 2007
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      Thanks M, though it's sad you were sharing in my mood.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    July 17, 2007

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    Loved the quote chosen as inspiration by the poetess,if this is followed it will lead to less perspiration,especially loved "and haze,heavy as white rum,slips into his eyes"Kudos.The reader applauds loudly.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    July 17, 2007
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    Great write...



    al

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