Beyond this life I can tell
that heaven will be just as hell
with people amiss and under scornful spell
making thier lies seem like a watery swell of oceanic waves of light and fire
and hear you shall find your one true desire
this IS heaven and this is hell
better you know it now than wait for death to tell
A contest entry
- Show Me Heaven by Jadon.
600 points, ended August 2, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
don't think
Comments
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This "IS" Heaven!
No surprises! I appreciate the 'heads up' ("better you know it now")
I have read your write several times and I keep coming back to it. Your write is straight-forward and well executed. The words match the rhyming well. I am fascinated by it.
To identify my fascination, it is a combination of the movement of the words as well as the thought. I feel others will apprecaite what you have wrought here as well. Thank you for your entry. Jadon
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