When we get into fights
I will never forget them
And how you made me happy
In the end
When we snook out after dark
I will always remember the joy
That you brought me on those nights
You held me close
When we tried to breakup
I will never forget how hard
It was and how we somehow got back
Together again
When we first met on that day
I will always remember the happiness
In my life and my very first
Love
When we tried to go our seperate ways
I will never forget how we somehow
Ended up together in each others arms
So unbreakable
When we knew we were meant to be
I will always remember the words
That made me melt with a burning
Love and passion for you
When we ran away hand in hand
I will never forget the chemistry
We had for each other at that very
Time and place
Even if something happens
I will still love you
Forever and always
A contest entry
- 13 on down... that's a nice round number...no, 14 ON DOWN! Yes, that's perfect. No, yes, no... oh, fine! 15 on down! by Ter.
600 points, ended July 27, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just for Kids! 12 and Under ONLY! by JustSimplyLissa.
1000 points, ended July 23, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FOR THE KIDS 13 AND YOUNGER: Loved Into Being by Sky Prince Ireland.
300 points, ended July 28, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me REAL by Logans-Mommy.
500 points, ended August 27, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 7 Trophies or LESS. LOTS OF POINTS by God is my reality.
700 points, ended September 29, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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It's not what I was looking for, but still, it is a very good write. Excellent job. It is very beautiful. Good luck in the contest
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To: Bella-babie
Well, if we all wrote of what we knew, then poetry would be so very dull! Look at Shakespeare, he never experienced death, but he wrote of it so profoundly that none could argue! In his own dialogue, he speaks of never feeling true love. Yet, the way he describes it in his theatrical plays, is too complicated to be proved wrong. You don't have to reply or anything, because I know your answer, but I just wanted to tell you this: just because we are young, doesn't make our elder siblings rulers of what we do, and what we think. -
And you know nothing about my life, so why don't you get your own while your at it; here's a clue: maybe try a cereal box? *oops, just my opinion again*
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Justsimplylissa, you have your own opinion, so you should just keep things to yourself next time. I didn't comment on your poem, so don't start an argument. Yeah, I may not know everything about my sister but I do know a lot, and she is a great writer, but she tends to tell little white lies quite often. All i'm saying is, to please keep your comments to yourself unless you're family by all means go ahead prove me wrong, but your just a stranger to us, so don't bud in on our personal life. It's not nice. Thanks
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LOL, I wasn't butting in, And my comments were not bad, She is a great writer, maybe you should be more constructive in your comments kiddo.
A piece of advice, If you don't like what people comment back to you, maybe you should reconsider your comments? And I didn't submit a poem, after all this WAS a 12 and under contest. I was HOSTING the contest.
And what arguement? Sorry but I think your delusional (oppz! just my opinion again). I didn't harrass you or any such thing. If you don't like someone else giving their opinion maybe you should reconsider posting such harsh opinions in the first place.
And to begin with, I didn't even know you were her sister. But given that you are, maybe you should consider being nicer to her? I have 2 of my own sisters, and we don't nor have we ever talked to each other like you do to yours.
Also, maybe you should stop pushing YOUR opinions on other people. Just a thought.
Hope your life turns out better.
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Not bad. I enjoyed this. Thanks very much for entering my contest. Good luck.
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Well JustSimplyLissa, what would you know? It's not like i'm some stranger reading her poem. I am her sister, and I think I would know. But I do agree that love can happen at any age, as for I was young when I had my first love as well, but at the ag of 12 it's too young. And a lot of people would agree with me on that. When you are 12, you have your crushes, and you're innocent. I don't believe 12 year olds can possibly know what love is until they are older, and gain more knowledge and experience from it. At the age of 12, it's more of a puppy love, not true LOVE. That's my point and since Jackie is my sister, I know that some of the lines in this poem are untrue. And i'm not being harsh, i'm being honest.
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I know from experience that someone can really love another that young. I was 11 and "dated" him until I was 13. 2 years of commitment for someone so young is remarkable. And To this day, I still think of him. You maybe her sister, but sometimes even sister's know less about their own flesh and blood then a total stranger's insight.
My opinion differs from yours obviously. We'll leave it at that Kiddo, She wrote a great poem. And sometimes the things we say in a poem are our true heart's desire, and sometimes our secrets that we don't share with others...
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Beautifully written and very passionate for someone so young. I disagree with bella-babie, Someone so young can feel great passion and love for another. Well done and well written. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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It may be beautiful, but it's not even true... and that just doesn't make it as effective as a reader. I mean, if it was someone who's been in a relationship for over a year or a long time, then it would be okay to write about love poems, but not when your 12 and you don't even know what you're talking about
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I disagree with you bella-babie, Someone so young can feel great passion and love for another. I know, because I speak from experience. Just because you bella, may not have experienced it does not mean someone else has not. You judge too harshly. Keep in mind that life is different for everyone. Some of us live a lifetime in a very short time. Some of us are lucky enough not to have to.
Please try not to be so harsh. It was a beautiful write.
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What?!?!
I think it's beautiful, except that I asked for no free verse -
Jackie, why do you write poems about love when you don't even know what love is your 12. Stop writing poems about lies, and write something of truth.
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