hook.
you barely feel it.
you keep swimming through your life.
till you feel the jerk.
War
ugly is the word.
no way you can make it clean..
war is raw with blood.
hate
refusing to learn.
or challenge what is the truth.
ignorance; hate rules!
In a list
A contest entry
- Dust Off Those Old Haiku (Traditional 5-7-5) by Pollycheck.
425 points, ended December 15, 2007, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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hook.
you barely feel it.
you keep swimming through your life.
till you feel the jerk.
War
ugly is the word.
no way you can make it clean..
war is raw with blood.
hate
refusing to learn.
or challenge what is the truth.
ignorance; hate rules!
Thank you for entering my ku contest. This is a very well written haiku chain. Thank you for sharing it. -
Wise words
i really like haiku and the zennish thoughts presented to provoke the deeper ideas on life. some rules in life are meant to be broken while others are the bases for life nicely penned
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