Your [self-portrait] of ♥madness♥
Won *First Place*
But the newborn .happiness. -->fades<--
You can keep :crashing: down those mirror's
But you wont see any clearer
You've become your worst |fears|
The momentary simplicity
Has shown up missing
& you've found yourself Asylum♥Empty
-->You<-- only have -->you<-- to wrap your hands around
You can scream for eternity
♥ but [no.one] will ever hear a thing
Put your sanity away;; locked into your pocket
Buy your *straight.jacket* a new padlock
Then again, do you really give a fuck?
You can read your story
In the newspaper in the morning
Of a girl who |used to be|
who used to be...
You've .severed. what's left of your arms
& the asylum♥empty feelings in your heart
Has left you there-behind insanity's bar's
In a land far.far.far
A
W
A
Y
.There's just no escape.
Author notes
[strung ^up^ and -->pulled<-- tight]
I chose the wordbank option
*I'm entering again for the sake of my sanity*
♥Cure My Tragedy♥
A contest entry
- i'm not your *star* by Dancing Marionette.
525 points, ended July 28, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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So beautiful I love everything you do, all your effects and everything, ur style your depth ur emotion. its all to real and strong
one thing that really jumped out at me and I think is my favortie part, is
"-->You<-- only have -->you<-- to wrap your hands around
You can scream for eternity
♥ but [no.one] will ever hear a thing"
Great job. -
holy shit.
I l-l-loved this!
my favorite lines were:
"You've .severed. what's left of your arms
& the asylum♥empty feelings in your heart
Has left you there-behind insanity's bar's
In a land far.far.far
A
W
A
Y
.There's just no escape.'
They rock the poem!
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this is good. I like the feel of it, I can see how it got the gold! good work. I'm loving it! keep it up!!!!!!
Crimson -
Another beautiful write darling;;
you certainly did manage to convey the perfect scene of a mental asylum. I went into one when my sister had a breakdown... It's not pretty and they can be fucking scary, can give you that.
Beautifully written darling anyway, good luck in the contest... May take a peak myself!
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i love this your reallly gooood
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i'm really glad you entered again, because this was amazingg bby. i absolutely love the title, i think it fits this poem so well, and its just great by itself. amazing job with the word bank.
thanks for entering [again] goodluck
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