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Atlantis

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D[r]ipping dolphin guides
to subterranean trench
where Atlantis hides

Imbedded within
the cetacean memory,
Atlantean sin

Atlantis within
Man’s secret pilgrim soul
surfaces, clocks in

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  • Once Upon A Mind
    August 20

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    First off - Very cool background! It's not too busy and doesn't distract me from the poem itself

    "D[r]ipping" This is very cool, double meaning! How clever are you! Nice touch - It took me a minute... lol But I got it

    "Man’s secret pilgrim soul
    surfaces,"
    -- Not sure why, this really stick out to me tho... I like it

    Amber

  • Godsemogurl
    July 26
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    Hey! This is a cool poem. You have nice adjective being used. Makes me want to jump into the poem!

  • fantasysmurf gold member
    April 12

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    I like

    Awesome background - EXTRA POINTS  Laughing

  • fantasysmurf gold member
    April 12
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    Guardians of the Secret

    You chose an excellent subject here. So glad you entered! There is mystery and power lurking within the waves and your words. Makes me want to read more... Well done. My favourite lines are:"Imbedded within
    the cetacean memory," Something they will never forget

  • Lily otv
    December 12, 2007

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    Well, what can I say about this piece apart from that it appeals greatly to me. I like the legend of Atlantis and find it fascinating to think that such a place could have existed. The sea is a place that still withholds so many secrets from mankind and I like the way you've used the dolphins as our guides to the deep.


  • Knight70
    November 8, 2007

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    I love to read poetry about the sea....

    I wrote a haiku a few months ago about bottlenose dolphins. I like yours better. I think it's great how you have tied in the legend of Atlantis into this piece. Knight70


  • Blueskywonder
    July 23, 2007

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    I like this piece... its "dolphin/Atlantis" content.
    An intriguing haiku. Welldone... thankyou for taking the time to enter my competition


  • Room without doors silver member
    July 16, 2007
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    Outstanding

    I liked the choice of subject and the imagery you created, a sense of the dolphins linked with all the amazing legend of Atlantis. This reminds me of a trip to Florida where we swam with the dolphins. They are such amazing creatures and so intelligent. I liked how these haiku's link together. A beautiful set of poems.

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