I remember when you said I was your .everything.
The air required for your breath
When it was you&me && me&you
[not just me;; not just you]
Author notes
Dancing Marionette
A contest entry
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It's lovely when we equal something better together than something well made apart. I loved the way this rung with the feelings I get when I think about whether I should be in a relationship for not. Nicely written, very emotive hon.
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I love this.
It says it all in so few words.
But the message is there.
my favorite part is the end...
[not just me;; not just you]
lovely dear. -
Beautiful would be an understatement
There really is no adjective to describe
How great this was.
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Beautifully written here... I know how this comes to be as well... The person who said it's better of to be alone never knew how precious it was to be with someone, either that or they had them torn away from them as being with someone is so very special. Nice little reversal in the second to last line. Worked well.
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I dont want to sit here and type this comment and make it say that this was good, because it wasnt.
It was wayyyyy better than that, you should definatly get gold for this one. And if you dont, well, then, i'll just keep my thoughts to myself...lol. :]
♥
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I love how sweet and simple this poem is, theres a perfect amout of lines and I think It says it all.
Who would like to be in my family?
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