He climbs up through my window
Within the silent night
He never speaks a single word
And holds his camera tight
And as I lay, he circles me
Taping all my dreams
I cannot help but wonder
How cold and real he seems
If he's a dream, when will I wake?
Is he real, or is he fake?
The sanity that he will take
Will make me ill and make me shake
I stare as he walks close to me
Thinking we are friends
As he films, he drains my soul
It's stuck inside his lens
Who would want to film me,
And who is this camera man?
I'd run, but I'm too scared to move
I don't know if I can
Director of my nightmares,
Does the lighting in his way
My lips don't dare to ever move
But if I had the guts, I'd say:
"Leave me now, for heaven's sake!
Are you real or are you fake?"
My sanity, I will forsake
And pray that I was not awake
Author notes
July 16, 2007... This is about a nightmare I had... The weird thing is, it took place in my room with me trying to go to sleep... A nerdy young man in a red shirt and blue jeans came in through the window and started videotaping me while I was sleeping... The reason that it scared me so much is that I couldn't tell if I was dreaming or awake... On top of that, my birth mother had scizophrenia (which is why I'm hoping I was asleep that night, because if I wasn't, it means I got it from her)... Sometimes I can't sleep now because I always think he'll come back.
"Death is to come only of the ones that wish it"
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I didn't care too much for the 3rd verse. It seemed overwritten compared to the other verses, and the rhymes seemed a tad off-center.
The last verse, which is similar to that verse doesn't really display such a damper, it doesn't break as the 3rd does.
Just an opinion.
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wow another great poem, I really enjoyed this and will continue to read more of you wrok, I'm adding you to my favs list
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Creeping indeed.A nightmare is horrible.I hate them,course,everyone does.Thank you and good luck!
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Oh my God, this creeped me out. Totally like a horror movie! I guess I get creeped out easily by these things, but anyway, this is freaky. Very nicely penned, though; thanks for entering!
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wow kool poem. odd dream but well penned.
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Wow ... I know what it's like to have that disease ... i too have it ... this was so creepy ... but intense ... the imagery was amazing ... and you did such a wonderful job describing it to me ... I can see it now in my mind ... and it gives me the creeps ... The sad part ... is how I can relate to this dream so much ... I have had a similar dream to this ... and it still scares me to this day ... very well done dear ... sorry you have to go through this ... it's tough ... but I am always here for you if you need to talk ... like I said ... I have the disease ... and it's nothing to fool around with ... good luck in the contest ...
Much luv
Smile, It Confuses People
Sparkeh -
I'm sorry, but I mistakenly neglected to click the "no prewrites" box on the contest form. It is a contest for new poems; I'll have to remove this entry. But if you want to write something new, please enter!
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Very well written and eerie. Good luck in real life and this contest.
Lady Dragonwyck
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Surreal...
LOVED the way you held the tempo and meter through this piece... A very modern theme, dark and surreal, with a deliciously classic treatment - I admire your discipline. Too many people are too lazy to take on the strictures of this type of verse. Well done!
. Rewarded 6
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When I first time see this I just see a blank page, very unusual for me to read hidden poems. By the way I hate when someone is taking my pictures and that is I don't know maybe it is because the same reasons you have
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fantasitc, dark and mistycal, loved this, Who would want to film me,
And who is this camera man?
I'd run, but I'm too scared to move
I don't know if I can
loved the whole idea behind this and it flows so well
good job
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The title is a clear introduction to the poem,the poet pens with a clear voice as to her fears,often a bad dream is recalled simply because we fear having the dream again,just like a self fulfilling prophecy,I know this as I had the same nightmare from the age of four,the details are horrific so I won't share them on the page lest a younger view them,but I share this to hopefully help,I tried meditation tapes to take the mind to a peaceful state before sleep and before I played the tape I willed myself to "re direct" or "edit" the nightmare if it occured so that should the same nightmare visit I was actually in control,should you have the dream again you could press an "imaginary" panic button and call the police,or press a button on a remote and "freeze frame" him and then rewind and watch him back out of the door backwards,explore what you personally would feel comfortable with so that you are prepared.This technique has helped many people and I hope it helps you.NB May I add the red font isn't easy on the eye dear poet,I understand it's used to add impact though and that it's your creativity,all the best with dealing with your sleeplessness.
. Rewarded 8
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AWESOME, VERY GOOD THANK YOU AND GOOD LUCK
that would scare the begeebers out of me as well this is very vivid and its beautifully written thank you and good luck in the contest -
This is a most powerful and, dare I say it, frightening, poem. The imagery is strong and it builds nicely to its climax. Very well written. Chris.
. Rewarded 4
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thank you my dear for enditing your author notes best of luck to you
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this is outstanding unfortunatly you didnt follow the rules you didnt put in your author notes what i had wished for you too so please do this and youll be fine otherwise i will have to delete your peom and i really dont want to this is very very outstanding
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Sorry I didn't read the rules at first. I re-read them and fixed it.
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wow. great poem. i hope that you were sleeping. i hate nightmares dont you. but i'd give any thing for a good dream. Hey maybe the nerdy boy thought you were a superstar fashion model. great write.
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