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The F-Train Encounter

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Across the crowds of distracted workers
hurrying home from another day work,
you appeared.

Our eyes met each other
for the first time and
they felt at home.

They sent a message of memory
so that we would never forget
and would seek and recover
that which was lost.

We lost each other
but only for a day.

The next day
on the crowded station platform
our eyes sought each other
and found what they wanted.

This time our mouths met
for the first time
and they smiled.

But that was all - eye and mouth -
an attraction became a longing.

But we lost each other again
but only for another day.

Finally, once our eyes and mouths
met and welcomed each other,
it was time for our bodies
to meet.

A little old lady came
and introduced us

as we rescued her.


Our eyes spoke volumes on the ride home.
Our mouths smiled and flirted.
Our bodies felt comfortable together
holding the metal pole all the way
to Brooklyn.

But the hand of God had moved us

like pieces on a chess board.
Our lives became joined.
Our souls became one.
Our spirits sang at the union.

And two lone souls,

riding home on the F train,

found their forever home
in each other's embrace.

Author notes

This all happened 29 years ago! The years pass by so quickly.

 

 

 

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  • Re-invention silver member
    May 18, 2008
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    aww how romantic... so pretty when love is given and not searched... great write!


  • SincerelyMegan
    March 2, 2008

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    For some reason I didn't quite pick up
    on this stanza
    "A little old lady came
    and introduced us
    as we rescued her."
    Maybe I just need to reread it.

    Other than that- this was a wonderful poem.
    Did this really happen 29 years ago? Wow!


    • thelordreigns gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      The way it happened was that we were standing on the subway platform and a train came by. All the people rushed into the train and this sweet little angel of a little old lady needed help getting into the train. Bill and I lunged at the train door at the same time to help her. Once we did that, we had the opening to talk to each other......thus, she "introduced us as we rescued her" from the crowds.

      Thanks so much for reading this! Yep, it did happen 29 years ago. The years have flown by and we are still in love!


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 9, 2008

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    tHIS IS VERY NICE . yOU DID AN EXCELLENT JOB WITH IT
    Congratulations on all of the previously won trophies.
    Thank you for taking
    the time to enter
    into my contest.
    I wish you the
    best of luck.

    RedwingSpirit


  • Ms Raneika
    December 24, 2007

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    This is such a beautiful write I liked how you expressed the other mate and you in the piece... thanks for entering much love, Raneika

  • givemetheworld
    August 22, 2007

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    well the memories of such wonderous love can stick with you forever. i felt like i was there witnessing it if not actually being the one on that train. great write. i loved it!


  • KateMadness
    August 19, 2007

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    Woah

    That happened 29 years ago? Wow! That's really great to hear about. Love; It seems no one can really live without it. Great job on it; I bet it's a sweet memory.

    Best wishes to you!


  • LunaAmara
    August 2, 2007
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    this is sooooo sweet
    i like the story behind it
    this overall is a great piece


  • GimmeSomeGasoline
    July 28, 2007

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    I really liked this. I know love at first sight and this is an amazing story of it. The little old lady seems almost to be the deus ex machina of the piece, but in real life, it seems so much more than that. Congrats on your happiness, may it last evermore


  • PaintedParisPassion
    July 28, 2007

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    Sweet

    This is so sweet.
    And to think its written from experience.
    This is something i love to read about.
    Your writing is beautiful.
    I hope you have many more wonderful years.
    Thanks for entering!!!
    Good Luck
    Keep Writing.

    :]



    PaintedParisPassion


  • m2fairies
    July 16, 2007
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    Very sweet


  • ms-cuddles silver member
    July 16, 2007

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    This is so sweet

    You are one of the lucky ones to have found your soulmate. This would have been perfect in my contest I just closed. I found my soulmate and it's really a funny story. I'll write about it one day. Good luck in the contest. Hugs~ Cuddles


  • VirginiaDarling
    July 16, 2007

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    Aww this is so sweet. You met your true love and still with him today, you are a lucky couple. Keep up the good writeing.


  • Mel-the-Believer
    July 16, 2007

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    This was awesome. I loved it. So wonderful. I loved the imagery and everything. Very nicely done. Keep on writing. God Bless!


  • Faithless Angel
    July 16, 2007

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    aww this is so sweet
    romantic and gentle,
    thank you for entering


    • thelordreigns gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      Thank you for giving me the inspiration to write about meeting my hubby!

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