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PACE the land

PACE the land

 

another rude morning
cold porch swings, empty swaying trees
i'm in bed, and it's too early to see much further than i am
these eyes will never heal from this

black rings in the sun
the image it will leave with me, until i feel the dark again

elevation's made
in our color code response
to terrorism's ways of working in our land

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i'm sleeping in, today
wake me when sir lincoln's dreams
return to being one with us

a unified america

a throat relieved of rude
awakenings

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  • Tangled Angle
    July 25, 2007

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    Wow, Loved this. I've been in political-society mode lately so this is right down my ally. Very insightful poem with lots of truths brought out, poignant and powerful. Thanks for entering, the constructive comments TO YOU especially you have helped me out more than anyone else has.. and I can't tell you how thankful I am for that. Thank you! Glad you stopped by, best of luck in the contest.


  • Phineas Red
    July 19, 2007
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    awesome.

    we seem to keep missing eachother lately.

    • marrow
      July 21, 2007
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      I know! What gives? It saddens me to the very bowels of my existence.


  • B Chandler
    July 19, 2007
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    cricket


  • FindingFaith
    July 18, 2007

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    You know, I do not find it cheesy in the least. I find it something we should all be praying for. I know that it says in the good book that it must be this way before He comes; but the morality has just left us. There are so many problems that people don't even realize with America. I've missed you. I hope that you are well. Trina.


  • layla.
    July 18, 2007

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    i think alot of people should read this.i m not an american, but i happen to know how things are for different people. there are all kinds of people there--- a world of various cultures. but the thing what gets to us[both americans and the rest of world] is the "on-going" lie[hint hint]:

    -killing can never pacify any land.
    -one lie leads to the next millions.

    a very good write.

    good luck with your busy life bro.

    esha


  • April Renee
    July 17, 2007
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    very nicely penned. good luck.

    blu


  • purpledragonfly
    July 16, 2007

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    I love the title and especially the line
    a unified america
    Much luck to you in contest! Glad to see a write
    Betsy


  • hilly
    July 16, 2007

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    I think the idea of this is a little...cheesy. But it's alright.

    I only have one suggestion. I thought the last lines would have sounded better as:

    a throat relieved
    of rude
    awakenings

    Just a thought though. Good luck in the contests.


  • lee-sharp
    July 16, 2007

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    very moody and a little political, but as with most of your work, the words are almost tactile. brilliant.

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