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See if I care

I care not for life, it is there to enjoy!
No risk to great to employ.
From making mistakes to hurting the soul,
I will continue this role.

Drugs
Alcohol
Sex

These are only three to enjoy!
The risks are great, but see if I care.
Nervous depth and shallow smile,
I must continue this role.

Addicted
Drunk
HIV/Aids

No great reward related to joy!
The risks deployed so see if I care.
Choices made and effect enjoyed,
Soon I will not continue this role.

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  • Red Rocket
    May 21

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    Bold approach for those who live fast and die young. I always gravitate toward sci-fi and societal writes. Why me lol? Thanks for sharing


    • FransB gold member
      May 22
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      Some of my

      1st steps into poetry by writing this one; thanks for leading me back to this one. Blessings to you. Frans


  • Rachel Kruger
    March 10, 2008

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    "See if I care" - catching title. Contents even better!

    Very well written indeed. Thought provoking. Ironically amusing. So many adopt a "role" as an only choice (at least they know the outcome!). Sad, but true.

    Unfortunately it is most of the time impossible to make addicts aware that there are other choices. This phenomenon seems to be universal where people get stuck in bad habits of some sorts and take it a day at a time. They just go with the ebb and flow, relinquishing all responsibility as if it is the easier way.

    I've read something somewhere sometime about that the force of a habit becomes worse with change (thus we only realize how bad it is if we want to change and then normally give up because it is "too much work"). And they miss out on the REAL fun!?

    By the way, I like your writings. It has true depth …

    • FransB gold member
      March 10, 2008
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      Thanks for visiting this poem. At times I am a little embarrassed at my 'early poetic attmepts', but then, we have to begin somewhere. One afternoon I sat down and wrote 16 poems [in 2 hours] - this being one of them for a book on social problems / issues. The poems ntroduce the reader to each chapter with a specific topic. The print is now in its fourth edition and the 16 poems were my first to be 'accepted' in a book. If my memory serves me correctly, this poem introduces that chpater on 'youth risk-taking behaviour'. Once again thank you for visiting and commenting. Frans