I turn around to look at you,
Those eyes of green and hazy blue,
Pull me in and toss me around,
I swear it's in those eyes I drowned.
A contest entry
- Eloquence in Brevity by RatherImaginative.
1400 points, ended July 31, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ 10 Lines Or Less ~ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended July 18, 2007, 42 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short and Simply Stated by My Darkness.
300 points, ended July 31, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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well... hmmm.. what do i say? please do not enter my contests if you can not follow the rules, it's just a waste of time...
as for the poem..
this is well written. -
Another little sweetie...
Beautifully written love the simple rhyme. It may well have been in those eyes you drowned, for I have drowned in my lovers eyes...
Good thing he pulled me back out again, huh? -
I have to caution you that since this poem is entered in a contest that closes before mine does, if it wins more than a HM, I will have to DQ this poem. I truly hope I won't have to, but if I do, I highly encourage you to enter another!
This is truely lovely. I imagine this scene would be the prelude to a kiss. Wonderful rhyme and meter! Thanks so much for entering my contest! -
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Never mind about the first part of my comment. I've decided not to worry about it.
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Welcome to the Poetic Bandits - nice to have you as part of this great AP group. Sounds like this is a nice position to be in - beautiful eyes taking you in in the lines of this poem. Have fun and nice to have you on board.
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