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Dead World

In this dead world i lie awake

hoping to mend my stupid mistakes

my blood is flowing

from my veins

my white sheets will never be the same

I'm getting weak

i don't understand why

Ive done this so many times

I'm going numb

i don't want to sleep

for the fear is i will not wake

my bed is bloody

i try to move

But instead i leave my body.

Author notes

was written while i was cutting... alot it is part 1 of a series that is listed on my main page.

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  • Avalanche.Echo
    November 16, 2007
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    A bit cliched, but nicely done.


  • Ravenblood
    July 16, 2007

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    Yikes. I really like that poem!!! Its short and intense- just the way I like them.
    “I'm going numb
    i don't want to sleep
    for the fear is i will not wake”

    I loved those lines… Good luck in the contest – Claire-Anne


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    July 16, 2007

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    OH MY GOD! Cool as picture, I'm stealing it! THANKYOU!!
    WOWZA! Ok favorite lines
    "In this dead world i lie awake
    hoping to mend my stupid mistakes
    my blood is flowing
    from my veins
    my white sheets will never be the same
    I'm getting weak
    i don't understand why
    Ive done this so many times
    I'm going numb
    i don't want to sleep
    for the fear is i will not wake
    my bed is bloody
    i try to move
    But instead i leave my body."

    For real!! Masterpiece! Woohoo! Thank you so much for entering!
    Bandaid.


  • Cherryberryboy
    July 16, 2007

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    I love it

    the ending may not have been the one I would choose but it was great. I can see it, feel the pain. Good Job!