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Sunrise [daybreak]

Little girl, you're so pretty.
Let me love you,
he whispers into her ear.
Crying crystal tears,
she wept,
the drops breaking with the day...
and her heart.
She is a clone of the darkness -
sad, mysterious, hidden...
and lost.
Sunrise start the new day,
and still her cheeks are stained,
along with her soul.
She doesn't know if she can take it,
the silence,
anymore.
He hurt her
in a way that can never be undone.
Sunrise turns into another...
[daybreak]
and still she is without love,
real love...

[whispers]
she's me...

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  • hks
    August 5, 2007
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    buy a hamster!!
    loll

    dude i <3 u sis
    =]

    and if anyboddy fucks with u..


    =D

    but nice poem
    i really like it
    your developing alot as a poet


  • PANDAmonium
    July 16, 2007

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    Wow Kizy Such a powerful Poem. But you know what? You do have real love. Of the friendly persuasion! lol. Ya know I love ya, ya crazy Chica.

    Love be the message,
    Peace be the journey.

    Justin


  • Sle3p
    July 16, 2007
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    realy good so sad also! This contest is sooo hard to judge great job good luck!

    -maddie


  • Beanbiscuit
    July 16, 2007
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    It's heartbroken.


    • happypurplepumpkin
      July 16, 2007
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      what you mean the option? not exactly, this is more of option number 4, something you don't have... real love... this is about something personal, not relationship-wise though. hopefully you catch my drift.

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