Love is not defined
by gender or race.
Its a feeling which can't be denied
You can't control what you are bound to face...
Fate,
The path with you were structured to take.
Sexuality
A gender disgrace,
or so they say.
HOMOSEXUALITY
you are gay
as they shun you and spit in your face...
Society can not erase
What is done in a lover's place.
Red
Orange
Yellow
Green
Blue
Purple
Believe in yourself.
Pride
Colors flash before my eyes
Rainbow Suicide
Take a chance for love,
Take the final stride.
As different as a an abstract painting
the colors of you and me
spread across the canvas of our dreams.
Love is not defined by man or woman,
It's simply wether or not
You love me for me.
Author notes
i wrote this starting out with just two lines about the rainbow then it ended up with the canvas lines leading to the entire poem about homosexuality
A contest entry
- even the wicked can love occasionally by unraveled.
450 points, ended July 21, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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There is a saying I like to believe: You don't choose love, Love chooses you. This was an exceptional poem in my opinion.
De -
this was very pure and true. You dont chose who you fall in love with it just happens. unfortunatly we do live in a cruel society that with time only seems to get worse. but if people can learn to accept each other for who they are and not by their definition then I think everybody would be much happier. This poem was so beautiful especially the land 10 lines. Well penned
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GREAT WRITE, I LOVE THE RAINBOW SUICIDE PART <3
KRISIS
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hmm, im not sure entirely how this piece relates to the contest prompt... surely you aren't saying homosexuals are wicked, hmm?
no, i understand where this came from, its heartfelt, true, and proud. i love the message that you have offered, and thank you for being one of the first people to not enter a dark poem haha <:-D
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it a very good write a lot of emotion very good keep it up
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amazing piece!
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"Believe in yourself
Pride
colors flash before my eyes
Rainbow Suicide
take a chance for love
take the final stride"
I LOVE THOSE LINES!!! This piece is amazing. Very good imagery and I could follow it well. Good job!!
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Wow,
that's a really beautiful poem.
And it reads well too, which just makes it just that much better.
Very Nice hun**
XJericaX
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i like this [: i think you did a really good job, but i have to agree with everybody that said something about punctuation, i think it's really important to have in free verse, that way it doesn't just seem like a running-on thought
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Well, I like it.
You have a 'the' which should be 'they' and a 'wiether' which should be 'whether'. I believe sexual preference is a choice, not determined by birth except that anyone can go either or both ways. I also feel that love is often denied, however; this is a very good poem and makes a strong point. What really counts most is being loved for who you are.
Andy
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I agree with Friday... very descriptive & some nice metaphors... punctuation is important; even with free verse & the like & is a bit of a bug-bear with me -- not that I'm a stickler for it, it just makes the journey less bumpy... still an excellent write & I enjoyed reading it... WRITE ON!!! 'd' (david)
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The gay pride flag is, in order;
Red
Orange
Yellow
Green
Blue
Purple
You have an extra colour in there.
This is an interesting piece, with some very lovely metaphors. I think it would do well for a bit more punctuation and a double check on the spelling but other than that, a nice piece.
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