i stare through the paint and
feel my faculties erode
i cannot think
it's far too thick
dry and fevered
i can pretend the off-
white is still drying
so long as i remain
conscious, for to see
is to remain blind
dozing off means
drowning in air-
choking guilt
images of twelve-year-
old fuck-ups that just
won't fucking die
it is no wonder why,
then, my mind slows
it screeches down
frozen in mid-play
my eyes are swampy
and i can't wake up
without pulling back
Author notes
“I shut my eyes in order to see.”
--Paul Gauguin
Partly inspired by "Comfortably Numb" by Pink Floyd.
Won gold in this contest: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2359794
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"it is no wonder why,
then, my mind slows
it screeches down
frozen in mid-play
my eyes are swampy
and i can't wake up
without pulling back"
-wow. finalist!
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Thank you.
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Good luck in the contest!!!
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Very Good Poem!
Yet this poem in short but yet truthful.I really would have liked knowing more about it then you wrote.Yet still I understood it's full meaning that you meant to get accross!Think's for shareing it with us all!!!*******LoveSpell-PurpleRose*******
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excellence is rare
It was a wonderful piece of poetry, not so sure a quickie would have a chance..lol
peace Muddy
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I think I have a couple other poems that won quickie contests, though I would have since pulled them out. I have, however, been saying what trophies they've won, if any, and provided a link to the contest. I imagine that doesn't fit your criteria, though.
Thank you for the applause.
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this wasn't a quickie contest winner...sorry...you still have time..if you have one
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Whoops, you're right. My apologies; mis-read that part.
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excellent use of the quote..very intense. Congratulations on a well-deserved gold.
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eyes wide shut with this one...stunned. Congrats!
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Wow. I'm not sure what to say. There was so much feeling in this. The emotion just bubbles up through the poem. This was a realy powerful write. Magnificent, and best of luck in the contest.
Kaitlyn
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