Today I made you a mixed tape
of everything that we know as "ours"
the back ground music to all those moments
where this love was just like the movies
-first kisses
-&& slowdances to [system of a down]
-when your g-g-green eyes would look into mine...
&& I'd m
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Darling,
I'm on another world with you
a world where we're inside the picture frame
&& those picture perfect moments
...never-end
you know,
I never expected this from you[from me]
so open && exposed
this love is too good to be true
"you are my sunshine"
the theme song to this fairy tale
Hand in hand & so in love, we're the
a colorful sequence in a black && white movie,
a nearly-perfect duo,
just two simple nobodies just trying to survive...
Love,
Today I made you a mixed tape,
of everything we've come to know as ours...
.
.
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Author notes
I used option 3, option 1.. kinda, wordbank 2, && option 7.
wordbank:::
Sunshine
Slowdance
Perfection
Green Eyes
Picture Frame
Survive
Colorful
Black And White
Phrases
you are my sunshine
today I made you a mixed tape
I'm on another world with you
A Love Like The Movies [love just like the movies]
So Open And Exposed
hope you like it. I tried to base it off of the relationship i am in. the slowdances to system of a down is completely true, lol. happy 6 month anniversary doll.
"your heart is my symphony"
A contest entry
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Comments
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wow.
I loved this. I know I have read it before, but I'm surprised I never bothered to comment.
this is ab-so-lute-ly amazing darling.
you should write more of these... because, well, this was a pretty long time ago, wasn't it..?
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♥
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this was nice, and it definitely had a few SHINING moments... I particularly likes these lines:
"Today I made you a mixed tape
of everything that we know as "ours"
the back ground music to all those moments
where this love was just like the movies"
&
"we're the
a colorful sequence in a black && white movie,
a nearly-perfect duo,
just two simple nobodies just trying to survive..."
reallllly cute, babe! well done -
Yeah, once again-- dirty-pretty format ruined it for me. This would be wonderful in prose format-- the nostalgia, the memories, and the romance. In my honest opinion, I think you should consider writing in a different format, it'll bring out the originality and beauty of your pieces.
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Ok so you totally rock my socks, lol. this was amzng. srsly. endofstory. and kudos to you, you followed the rules!!! yay!!
Hand in hand & so in love, we're the
a colorful sequence in a black && white movie,
a nearly-perfect duo,
just two simple nobodies just trying to survive...
^^those were awesome!!
♥
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