when we was music
we wore shades to hide our dreams
pupil dilated fantasies
man we dreamed
oh yeh!
how we fuckin' dreamed
we buskered up the turnpike
creating thematic storms
we picked our way to paradise
for nickels and pennies
when we was music
we played a boney tune
without skeletal exception
we laid our music bare
and our image was traumatic
we caused a minor panic
in subways and corridors a-plenty
we echoed like a pandemic
when we
when we was
music...
man! we was...
music!
Author notes
This is about 'My Magnificent Obsession' & being a muso thru & thru...
Inspired by Paul McCartney's 1970 'McCartney' album
A contest entry
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This is.... very interesting
thank you for entering and good luck!
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.....*sighs*....BRILL!
bloody brilliant! thats all i can say!! seriously! a write like this? WHO CAN GO WRONG!
thank you somuch for entering!
and good luck!!! XXXXXXXXX
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WoW
This could be about a number of people in the music world. Let me know who/what its about! -
Interesting
I like your foundation for the poem, its solid and to the point. Thanks for entering. -
nice!
yea def great flow, loved this!! -
Loved this. Good flow, good rhythm, puts me in a . . . nostalgic sort of mood, puts a smile on my face, makes me think of beauty and the high. Very awesome.
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very awesome flow, beat that sets itself up.
and i just like the line "when we was"
entirely good stuff, if youre ever in the ann arbor area.... yeah
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Kick ass! This is my kind of poetry. Congrats, you've made it to the finalists list
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