It is dark
There is no room to breathe
Lord please help me
I’m dieing
please help me
I need your love right now
I know you love you love me
your in my heart
My cup runeth over
with joy hope love and peace
Thank you
You've helped me now
I feel much better
with you by my side
Loving and caring for me
Lord your my savior
And i love you more than anyone in the world
Oh Lord thank you
Thank you
I kneel on my knees
And worship at your feet.
AMEN
In a list
A contest entry
- even the wicked can love occasionally by unraveled.
450 points, ended July 21, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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great write, thats for entering my contest and good luck! xx -
WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY!
Well this was quite a spiritual piece and I think you did a good job with it. I am sure there are many that will enjoy this piece here. Feel free to ask me any questions and I hope you enjoy your time here.
Despair
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first of all, you spelled "dying" wrong. i like the religious angle you took to the prompt. im not really religious but i can appreciate this. if you wanted to improve this you could look for imagery instead of using simple lines such as "Oh Lord thank you". thanks for entering,
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Well I am only 8 years old.
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