I'm drowning,
sinking into a big black hole.
Everything I want is just out of my grasp.
Is it because my heart wants to love again?
I'm too afraid.
I'm falling,
my life is ending,
it is the only sweetness in this mess.
If I love again is that wrong?
I'm fading,
my emptiness is showing for all to see.
It is okay because I am dying.
I can't love again,
I only love him.
The black hole is getting brighter and welcoming,
am I beginning to love again?
I run to the light,
I feel the love,
If I love again, I think I will be okay.
It's too late,
I have to go,
my heart is exploding with love,
but only for the dead.
Please don't cry,
I want to go,
it is my time to die,
I'm trying to love,
but death has grasped me,
I welcome it,
I want it.
But now I am beginning to feel true love again,
can I be saved?
Is love the answer after all?
I finally love another.
my misery has turned to happiness,
death moved on,
I'm alive.
I'm in love.
A contest entry
- even the wicked can love occasionally by unraveled.
450 points, ended July 21, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I just came back to read this once again, and I spotted an error. In the line:
"It's to late,"
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wow, another good one
great expressions about love, once again good luck! -
very powerful and emotional write
I love this write. this sounds as if you are truly stuck between a rock and a hard place. i have been here. i know you still love him and you always will. and even if you are not ready for a new love, one day you will be.... just let your heart lead your way... -
i think this piece is alright. i really like the line "the black hole is getting brighter and welcoming." if you wanted to tweak this to match the contest prompt, i think you could add more about love being the answer instead of death. thank you for entering,
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changed poem
Thank you for the comments. I added love to the poem and like it better, I hope you do too. Let me know. Warmest Wishes, Gianna -
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yes i definitely like this poem better now that the ending has changed. i appreciate you spending extra time to change it... best wishes
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So dark. I love it. Especially the last stanza just touched me. I'm definitely going to bookmark this. You're drowning, falling and fading! Love it!
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very dark
this one is excellent.. the welcoming death is very dramatic the ending adds punch... good luck in the contest
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