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Disappointment

Daring to love you
In spite of the
Sad way you treat me.
All this time I
Pretended I didn't see,
Pondered your deception, and
Opened myself to your
Insatiable
Need
To hurt me.
Meanwhile,
Everything I thought was true
Never has been.
Thanks for all the lies.

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  • soulfultia gold member
    November 25, 2007

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    Another outpouring of your soul, this must have been a difficult time for you. I hope at this point some healing has begun. Impacting penning, lingering on after the read...~Tia


  • xxlisajazminexx
    August 11, 2007

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    I absulutely Loved this Piece........
    so much emotion in your words.......
    Not many people can capture feelings
    as well as you have in the poem.......
    How every line flows nicely into the next......
    great write!!!!!!!!!!!!
    I cant wait to read more of your poems!!!!!!
    A++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++


  • ebbandflow
    August 2, 2007

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    ~ Raw Emotion ~

    This shows me, and should PROVE to you the situation at hand. We both know that if it merits a poem or verse it is a real raw emotion that should be addressed. You're in my thoughts.

    Tonya


  • Mykeee
    July 31, 2007

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    whoa ~ not only in acrostic form but what deep power in your words. You can feel the anger and disappointment in what you are pushing to the reader.

    I
    Pretended I didn't see,
    Pondered your deception, and
    Opened myself to your
    Insatiable
    Need
    To hurt me.

    This caught me dead in the eye. I really felt this one ~ MIKeeeeeeeeeee

  • tylerannatheart
    July 22, 2007

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    i love this i wish i could get permission to have this added in my divorce papers to my husband lol .after years being with a man that i had the illustion of who he was and finally woke up and relaized that i wanted something more in my life.great write i love the emotion of this

  • Liquid memories
    July 20, 2007

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    finally

    you are awake to the reality of his deeds. Never too late to see what we have refused to see. you did not want to admit he was an AO, but the sooner the better, as you continue on with life.Always put the badness behind and look forward to another beautiful day.

  • MeSuperSub
    July 17, 2007

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    I love your wording, "Pondered your deception". The word ponder instantly brings your mind to a deeper more complexed way of thinking. Great write. ~Sub~


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 16, 2007
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    This was really a strong write! Your emotions reach out and almost smack the reader! Me! Yikes. I hope this was emotionally releasing and leads to healing. Wonderfully penned, in my two favorite colors! Pleased to see a new post from you, clearly you have not lost your touch! ~Tia

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