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Resolve

O wicked, winding, wistful web!
why are you woven for me?
O damnable den of delicious doom!
I dare not be drawn in.

Those who have tiptoed
upon your silken threads
have been engulfed
in your entanglement.
Brilliant, alluring enamorment
casts her murky shadow
Upon the one who lies in wait—
who, having deceived,
might then devour.

    The crafty weaver becomes captor.

I won’t be taken in!
Nor will my bulging brood of bands
Be interwoven there to draw another in.

In this I will not falter,
Though fault, or fear, or love aloof
Entice me.



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  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 30, 2007

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    This is interesting.
    Nice alliterations done and well expressed through metaphor.

    Harrisham Minhas


  • Mirthryl
    July 23, 2007
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    This starts off with a bang, lots of alliterism, and a nicely dark description of something fearful.

    I like how you describe those succumbing as "tiptoeing", communicating that they are really aware of the inappropriatness, but hoping, somehow, not to get caught. Good description of 'what lies in wait' in the shadow of enamorment--who bothers looking in the shadows when such fascination is right before them?

    I do not understand what "bulging brood of bands" is, unless your children born in the bands of wedlock?

    Strong declaration in final stanza. Surely all those enticements are employed daily, and ever more loudly!

    Very enjoyable write.


    • ten thousand cicadas gold member
      August 7, 2007
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      Thanks for your comment.

      "Bulging brood of bands" indicates the potential for weaving similar web and participating in similar relationship, thereby being guilty of drawing another into a web of your own creation--the very thing that you know to be wrong and to avoid at all cost.

      Hope that helps.

      • Mirthryl
        August 8, 2007

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        Yes! Thank you for helping me understand.

        You have hit on another huge enticement, the prideful whispering that we have talents and skills and are certainly capable of creating a web that is at least as effective, if not superior! Just to show that we CAN! And then, of course, to Prove it works, by trapping something...


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    July 16, 2007

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    Sorry, I had to chuckle a this one a bit. The scene in my head reading it was surreal! Creative and quite the well done work. Bravo!

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