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Rain

I have walked over mountains and through valleys.
Swam rivers and oceans and yet i trek.

I walk with scabs and scars,
ney wounds for they have not healed
they bleed and dont let me dream.
For I have fallen manifold.
Because the road is trecherous
like the footsteps of hell.

When i look up the sky is clear
the sun's blistering arms caress my muddied skin.
I cry dry tears praying for darken clouds.
That may wash my pain away.

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  • Riftkin gold member
    August 31, 2007
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    When i look up the sky is clear
    the sun's blistering arms caress my muddied skin.
    I cry dry tears praying for darken clouds.
    That may wash my pain away.

    I have not found them yet myself


  • Ale E
    August 12, 2007

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    Very nice imagery. Thank you very much for entering my contest. Best of luck.

    Always keep on writing!
    aleXOX


  • Jai Guru Deva
    August 5, 2007
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    Beautiful.

    option number


  • zillion
    July 23, 2007
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    haunting.


  • Samantha-.
    July 18, 2007

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    This was beautiful. It was so detailed and the metaphor and imagery was amazing. I loved it. This was a beautiful piece. Good luck!!!


  • Despairkitty
    July 16, 2007

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    WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY!

    I am a greeter and wanted to welcome you to the site. I think you did a great job with this piece!!! Feel free to ask me any questions.
    Despair

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