I cut myself everyday,
I started when you went away.
No one can help me here I stay,
I died the day you went away.
The blood I see is from my soul,
if you were here I'd be whole.
It's hard to live without you here,
being alone is what I fear.
The time has come to say goodbye,
I slice my wrists,
it's time to die.
A contest entry
- Simple complexity- especially for new members! by Menace.
650 points, ended July 16, 2007, 9 entries
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This seems to be a very common affliction now days. You are very honest and brave to share your story! Thanks for your entry and best of luck in contest!
Love~
AZ
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wow this is amazing, you are a strong woman for all you've been through
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wow, this is really good.. cutting isnt easy to deal with and you dont usually find any poems that arent too cliche or they are usually uninteresting... great write
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thank you
I like to know that someone reads my poems and likes them. Writing a poem about cutting has to be delicate or careful or it turns out not right. I have lived in hell for years, not only in mourning but in self mutilation. I have stopped cutting for some time now and hope I have beat it. It helps to write about it. But the pain I go through about my lose is till here and dont think will ever go away.
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"The time has come to say goodbye,
I slice my wrists, it's time to die."
I like those lines. Was a perfect ending.
This piece is very simple, but you still get out with a lot feelings, which I really relate to. -
excellent
the simplicity in this poem really makes it work well... i absolutely love it.. i can feel your sadness and hopelessness... way to get your message across..
good luck in the contest...
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Impressive
Although I don't condone cutting, I feel poetry is an outlet. It should not be judged or censored. With that said, I felt this had a lot of emotion for a simple piece. Congratulations you will be moving to the finalists list. Please do not reply so you may remain annonymous.
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