Mind illusions played beneath
What's a corpse to me he seeks
A love forgotten but not lost
A memory stricken, highly costs
Raving, Ranting, & Rambling on
I hear all, I wish he was done
Moment after moment ruined for a past time
Shall I cross this fair yet thick line?
A beaten remembrance broken but not replaced
A loved memory is a treasured escape
A corpse left 6 feet below
A love no more for which I loathe
Stomping on the ground where I lay
The corpse he loves to enter the day
Author notes
The title is a little difficult to understand so I'll tell you here
It's love in death
Love is capitalized in the word death
Hope you enjoy
FORBIDDEN LOVE
dazedXdesires
This fits your contest simply because I cant love him because he loves her
A contest entry
- Forbidden Love by Ignis Corpus.
425 points, ended July 17, 2007, 36 entries
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thankfully we do still love even after they are gone
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Appealing.
This was very well constructed. I like the symmetry. I like the images. I like that you made that image of them stomping on your grave. This should have at least got you some points in that contest. Rich.
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ok i know you told me about this poem and i love it....but just returning a favor it just randomly sent me to this poem....i love it....
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the way it is
that is the way it is - even in death some love overshadows -
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"A beaten remembrance broken but not replaced
A loved memory is a treasured escape"
I really like those lines. They are really poetic.
The title is very smart. Saying two things at once. Usually I hate those kind of sticky caps, but I like this one, because it actually means something. Great! -
good poem i understood why you titled it this way, i have a strange way of thinking i think that is why my mind is so wonderful jk. good job on this piece and good luck in the contes
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Wow, Damn... this one is defenatly one of my Favorites
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this one actually is true for the most part...
a boyfriend of mine was in love and the girl left him and got into a car accident and he spoke to me of his love for her..which at the time was all teh things he was telling me not to be
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