You where the one that helped me most,
The most of time people just looked down on me.
Now that I look back at all of the miss deeds I've done.
You were the one that helped me the most,
What have I done to deserve such treatment.
To look back and see you evil smirks.
What have I done to deserve such treatment from them,
nothing but be myself and try to please everyone.
I know that I'm not perfect, but now that I see.
If I do look back and see your scorn,
I now know that it doesn't matter.
As I fight for those words, I look back to see.
If the people around me scorn at me,
No other person can see me as such.
But I cast you aside with nothing more than a wave.
Now I look back and all I can call out,
is what have I done to you.
You loved me for me,
I can now see that.
But now all I can say is what have I done
Author notes
it's the best I could do for something so unexpected
A contest entry
- cursive head pains - Phrase Prompt #2 by Ryno.
300 points, ended July 15, 2007, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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hmn...
I'm glad I found this poem, it's something people can relate to, and it has a 'quoth the raven'(by edgar allen poe) type of feeling to it. Very dark, sad and yet angry underneath. I'm glad that I was introduced to your works.
thankyou so much for sharing this with allpoetry.com.
much luv~
kitty -
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thanks again this piece is one of my favorites but I got the impression that no one liked it, but I'm glad that I put it on here
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Really don't like the repitition in this. It makes this poetry seem ramblish and it covers up the emotion that was portraying itself so strongly in this piece. I love pure emotion poems as much as the next person, but if your gonna do this, it is hard to make it effective like this. Overall I still think it was a nice piece and thanks for the entry.
Ryan -
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thanks for the comment, sorry it wasn't what you were looking for
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