Kill Me Please

I live in hell,
what can I do,
kill me please,
and I'll kiss you.

I hate my life,
since you died,
now there's no one by my side.

Me and you,
the perfect team,
now it's just a miserable dream.

When you were here,
it was so much fun,
no matter what,
we were one.

Now you're gone,
I sit and cry,
kill me please,
I want to die.

A contest entry

Show me your talent! by Beating. 1000 points, ended July 17, 2007, 34 entries
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vici377
July 15, 2007

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overwhelming sadness
the hopelessness of the situation is very apparent you bring this to the reader... great job..best of luck in the contest...

Beating
July 15, 2007

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so sad. Really, I'm sitting here almost crying!
The rythm in this is just amazing. It flows so well.

One thing though. In the line:
"not it's just a miserable dream."
Shouldn't it be "now it's just..."?

right now

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