honey buttered
shadowed brick
warm still
breath air
rumbling thunderous
spirits dance
gentle balm
rain falls
as oil
slick moist
on pavement
slab path
warm oil
sweated air
thick hot
wet air
downpour waits
damp musty
earth scent
in wings
wash pain
soothe and
drench me
words pared
to bone
senses alive
Author notes
Wanted to convey tonight in two words a line. Maybe it only works in England !
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I've done two poems like this, but I didn't pull it off as well as you did. Great job, the words really came together well.
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Wow. Very interesting and powerful. It flows extremely nicely. It has a kind of caution to it, that sort of "calm before the storm" environment. I'm quite fond of this, extremely good work
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I think it worked just fine. Sounds like a wet night for you. An interesting write conveying a sense of want and anticipation. Nicely done.
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Hey this was pretty kool! Really good word choice
I liked the spirits dance line the best! Seems like a very interesting night tonight for you 
Well done for this! xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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