Sharing pasta for two
He is so good to me
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Eating and sharing and caring
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
Sharing pasta for two
He is so good to me
F
u
l
f
i
l
l
e
d
two ways
I think that the suggestion that Susie left you is a very good one. It would be nice if you could convey the same thought with a sense image. -
This is a nicely shaped haiku, and the thought behind it is so sweet. Only one suggestion to make it stronger, L2, "He is so good to me," can you show an image of that-oh, there must be many you can think of. I like what you have done so far, this is really nice.
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Neat
Great to see you are having fun with this. Keep writing, it is the best salve I know of.
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