I cling to my ray of light,
hoping the darkness doesn't close in.
It is dark all around,
it is growing bigger by the second.
The light in me uses it's weapons,
hope, faith, peace, and love.
The darkness also has a weapon,
a very powerful one, heartbreak.
The light and dark battle each other,
but there is not enough light in me,
to stop my heart from breaking,
while the darkness consumes me.
Author notes
This was for the first topic, dark. It isn't that good, but it's better to write a bad poem then not to write one at all!
A contest entry
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All the light comes from things of the heart, that love and peave hope and faith, so all that has to be done to take that all away is a broken heart That's no fair, who created these rules! Sometimes though, it's easier to play by the dark's rules and embrace it before it shatters you, then just learn to swim in it. Conquer the darkness.
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Ok kind of tricky "I cling to my ray of light hoping the darkness doesnt close in it is dark all around" If your clining to the ray of light when did the darkness come around I feel what ur trying to say. But you need to just let the ink flow. I can tell that in this peice you were trying very hard to express yourself just let it flowwwwwwwww
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Another dark one, but very cleverly put with nice imagery and with a nice personified voice ringing in the backdraft.
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