Suzie was a very saucy lass
who mesmerized the lads
their eyes making a mental map
across a body finely clad
Wherever she went, at any time
organised chaos followed
so splendid was she to the eye
they found it hard to swallow
Young ruddy cheeks of these young lads
disclosed their heightened feelings
as they floated on her every word
that always left them reeling.
Sadly once there came the day
when their dreams were ground to dust
as she enlightened them she'd sold herself
to one with a wealthy investment trust!
Author notes
WORDS AND WORDBANK USED IN ORDER-
SAUCY, MESMERIZED, MAP, ORGANISED CHAOS, SPLENDID, RUDDY, DISCLOSURE(DISCLOSED), GROUND INTO DUST, ENLIGHTENED, SOLD.
A contest entry
- Wiley word bank by Star Shine.
500 points, ended July 23, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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very wiley and well done in the use of the words and phrases, as they help your tale to flow, and brought a smile to my face. You used the words as your own and helped us to know Suzie, and I agree, there are so many real Suzies out there! Thanks for the entry, hope you had fun with this.
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You have used these words from the bank to create a very clever write. I enjoyed it, and I wish you well in the contest
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thats really clever and it made me smile! and its so realistic too, I could name a few saucy suzies...great job
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lol i like this it gave me the giggles lol good luck in the contest xxx cheeky xxx
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awsome and fun write. made me smile and laugh. because im sure we all know someone who is like this
lol awsome write all the best of luck in the contest
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