When people say “I love you”, is it true ?
What kind of love resides within a soul ?
Love-hatred is a quite explosive brew,
when anger soon appears to play its role.
The flowers of the seeds that once we sowed,
through anger’s flame have turned into despair.
To ruin has now turned our blessed abode,
which vapour of regret can not repair.
Yet there’s a secret salve to soothe such pain :
the balm of unconditioned love and peace,
which liberates from envy’s mortal chain,
in union, thoughts of separation cease.
True love contains no hatred, fear or wrath.
When two are one, they walk a single path …
Author notes
an english sonnet in iambic pentameter and an abab cdcd efef gg rhyme scheme
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I wrote this sonnet in ten different versions :
I. PETRARCHAN SONNET
II. FRENCH SONNET
III. ENGLISH SONNET
IV. SICILIAN SONNET
V. ITALIAN SONNET
VI. SPENSERIAN SONNET
VII. KEATS SONNET
VIII. KYRIELLE SONNET
IX. DORN SONNET
X. SARABANDE
"One Sonnet - Many Forms (Ten Versions)"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3189850
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Very well done...
Write on!
*PEACE*
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I understand your devotion to your subject matter, such wisdom it imparts. Well written and I thank you for this lovely entry.
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beautiful
So very pure and classic thought...beautifully written. i wish I could write like this.thanks for sharing
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Remarkable
This is a beautiful sonnet… In my opinion, sonnets are the most difficult form to write, especially when written in iambic… I’m trying to learn iambic, English being my second language, iambic doesn’t come easily…. But I’m not letting the hope diminish… I’ve read all the entries of this contest and I liked your the most… generally I’ve noticed that in a form poetry one looses the smoothness and neutrality while trying to abide by the rules… but this one has not been forced or stretched… your words have conveyed a great message… though sometimes it’s easy said than done
I also like the volta (turn) part of it;
Yet there’s a secret salve to soothe such pain:
the balm of Unconditioned Love and Peace,
which liberates from envy’s mortal chain,
in Union, thoughts of separation cease.
Very well said… and superbly written…. Good luck in the contest…
mina
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Lovely flow as all English sonnets smell, the fragrance from which melody and topic harmonise and the way in which you have done it, brews an elimentary logic such as 'oneness'. Lovely work.
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the balm
... of Unconditioned Love and Peace, and with that line your poem takes on so much meaning! Your thought processes were lovely and hit the mark in a good fashion! You, I and we ... know these truths and you have spoken them in such a beautiful sonnet with sound philosophy! Good luck in the contest too! joy
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When people say “I love you”, is it true ?
I do not believe people can correctly identify either pronoun I or you. We have suspicions of what they mean, yet our contextual understanding is too limited for the phrase ever to have the meaning we wish. Love is shown through deeds, not words.
Wonderful sonnet, by the way!
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Wow, eight versions!! This is amazing. Such a wonderful message for all who read. True love only walks down one path. No fear, hatred or wrath. You have said it all beautifully. Excellent write
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how I wish I could write a Sonnet as well as you do ma chere amie du coeur. Well maybe I could , but I have no such patience in any aspects of my life
and patience is such a virtue. So not only is the sonnet great [in my un-professional opinion], but the message it contains is one that should not get lost in and for the sake of the form.
Ca vas labas? I hope so. Une chere amie de moi a perdue son oiseau en voleElle est desolee. C'etait un African Grey comme le mien {Sam} . Elle a ouvrit la porte ....et voila. Il ya deux semaines maintenant, et Blake etait comme son enfant.
Please bear with me practicing my French writing and re-learning. It is so sad that i do not have the opportunity to do so here , so you get the "pleasure" of it
I do hope that all is well with you. I think of you often [especially when I am here practicing with thet morph program [since you are the one that led me on to it. Please know........that I love you always [even if times are sparse to always write.
much love et bisoux gros
jeanne/reenie/iraine
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The implications of which you write are great for it is founded on compassionate wisdom. Although you used a moderate number of lines many things are said in these words. It reflects the essence of the powers of this universe. I hope many will read, ponder and possibly study matters beyond the surface that are abundant yet unknown for a large part. I see this poem as a kind crusade against ignorance. Having an array of titles or sharp wit does not necessarily exclude ignorance, it is more likely to incite to lean back and be content with the achiefments in life instead of searching for the Truth. The structures and mechanisms in life are multi-layered and treacherous. Touching upon the essence of matters, like you did here in this expression, may urge spirits to re-consider their views and beliefs. This process never ends. The way in which you put things here will be an encouragement to think in the right direction - toward The Light. Thank you for creating and sharing. I appreciate your persistent efforts, wrapped in appealing communications. Take care,
Chris
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