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At First Sight

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Once in a lifetime lucky few may find
such inspiration words can’t even try
to pin down, predefine, or qualify,
limit, understate or question why,
scorn karma as coincidence or lie.
Yesterday, by more than chance, I dined
across from eyes. Synaptic shocks defy
Time itself, and soul electrify.
eyes 
That first glance opened invitation.  Blind
before ‘one’ must have been as every tie
to gravity dissolved, - no low, no high -
while everywhere the spirit seemed to fly.
Base substance shed, trite trammels left behind.
The message all embraced and somehow signed
dimensions new of rainbow hue, thereby
offered space, let feelings multiply
eyes 
That message understanding underlined.
No need for questions, no need for reply, ~
answers sprung spontaneous apply
a lining bright to help identify
the meaning of the universe, to bind
its discords into harmony aligned
as limits disappeared, sight cleared, thereby
abolishing all need for ‘how ’ and ‘why’.
eyes 
Like lightning current passed. Two intertwined,
upwards spiralled seven heavens high,
each could discover, reach, personify
both peace, release, within a soul-storm’s eye.
Within this ‘vortext’ top-like spun some kind
of harmony ~ unseen yet predefined ~
responding, permeating all, ~ as “my”
no sense retained, swept out by inner eye.
eyes 
We shared intense impressions counter-signed
by wonderment, as interactive high
engraved emotions, inklings, on the fly,
Rhyme’s splendour fans reflections, spans earth, sky,
touched, as it were, by karma to unwind
in every thought and everything, the mind.
These shared perceptions alter for the best
our reach on life as here pen comes to rest.

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  • PianoMan
    July 26

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    This is a good poem. I found it a little confusing so I won't comment on it to much to make sure I don't misinterpret what you wrote. It is amazing all the different places that insperation can come from. Good job!
  • albymyheart gold member
    July 26

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    You have managed to think of so many ways to describe the feelings of love at first sight. The creativity of mind flows throughout this write. However I felt it was a bit wordy for the subject...I didn't "feel" the emotions of loves first moment of bliss as I read, but maybe that is just me. The rhyme is great of course. alby

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  • Shannanagan
    July 13
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    nice write
  • :)

    very pretty!

  • Passive
    June 27

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    simply an amazing poem, if you are not already a published and famous poet, i would expect you to soon become one. Beautiful.

  • Angelicsoul gold member
    June 13

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    exceptional

    "That first glance opened invitation. Blind
    before ‘one’ must have been as every tie
    to gravity dissolved, - no low, no high -
    while everywhere the spirit seemed to fly."

    If it's at all possible to take the essence of a feeling and pin it down with words, you've done it here with these few lines. It's humbling, thank you for sharing.

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  • Kelly2h
    June 8
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    i really liked this poem
    you have written great

    thanks for the great poem-you really deserved it. A beautiful poem! I want to print this out and share with my peers. You cannot read this without being emotionally moved. It is heart warming and heart rendering at the same time. I love the title and the theme-you keep it clearly tied throughout the work. Keep up the good job!

  • Maedes
    June 8

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    Like the title...and yes sometimes in life we dont need questions, nor reply...keep belief to keep our mind thinking the positive things

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  • Superb

    Wow, another most excellent write. Imagery, rthym, and rhyme are just fine. Hope all continues to go well with you.

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  • You are painting the life through the whole universl scenario..this is a wonder in the shape of a poetry..well done.

  • Amaranthine Lover silver member
    July 16, 2007
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    flaming piece, nice work!

    would you like me to get you anything?

  • Riftkin gold member
    July 15, 2007
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    Well M'lady, I must admit, his ID forgot to list his age. I might have to frisk this one to see if he complies with the rules.

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    This was a great take on the option that you have apply your talent too. Thank you

    Riftkin.


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 15, 2007
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