Shaken spewed souls
Wrestling against parallels
Mystical darkness tiptoeing across pitches
Raveled in hues of fear
Sporadic breaths exhaling tints of ever night
Contoured skull paths
Leading to pits epicenter
Brimstone implosions mimic fields of dreams
Quintessential whispers scream psychological desolation
Reaping grim fruits of fragmented memories
Forsaken carcasses wail of souls spanning
Insatiable flames while slumber eludes
Gurgling pleas spit into crimson pools of hopelessness
Fueling writhes of chaos amongst the damned
Ethereal hordes clumped and cobbled in adorned fright
Leering stone-faced beyond sacrifice and altar
Blood filled goblets canted to twitching, wicked lips
As two cross pit vowing…
“I do”
Now kiss the bride
Author notes
Option #1
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A contest entry
- ~**~Pic Inspiried (dark pics)~**~ by MoonlightBeam.
600 points, ended July 20, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
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450 points, ended July 31, 2007, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
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300 points, ended August 19, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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600 points, ended August 24, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
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600 points, ended January 10, 2008, 19 entries
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wow, you paint a wicked picture with your words. chilling, creepy and kind of sad i think. well done.
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Excellent write
Thank you for entering
~Pastel
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This is very dark and hollow and raw, with some emotions that make you feel as low as the ground itself.
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wow quite creep but extremely well written
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lol.... creepy. But VERY well written. Great diction. The only issue I have is that there isn't any puntuation and that each character starting each sentence is capitalize.... thats always bothered me.... just though I would let you know... otherwise.
GREAT poem
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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wow, nice job, love the pic, good luck in the contest
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Dark sexxy and perfect!!! Love it!!! Best of luck hun!
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This was absolute wickedness! It created very intense images that built to their evil union. An awesome visit to the darkside. Good luck in this contest!
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Very beautiful. You used quite a bit of imagery, which I adore. Your word usage is perfect and very indepth. Very dark, I like it. Good job.
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Awesome!!!
Wowzer this is wicked, well done! -
very nice...amazing imagery. A very beautiful piece. Thanks for entering and good luck :]
Avec amour *~Krymsin Kyss~* -
ooo i loved this! so dark and mysterious. great job! thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest!
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Simply marvelous. It's elegant but dark is its nature. Nothing is darker than when death takes up a bride. You can just imagine all the horrid things that those two can come up with. Excellent vocabulary too. Impressive. Good write and good luck.
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Quintessential whispers
excellent line, the edge, the edge -
This is such an awesome poem! I loved it! I also loved the picture. Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck!
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after rereading all entries that were given, and many a days of careful contemplation on such wonderful entries, i have arose to my final answer on the contest. contest was judged based on the skill of the poem that was written, and how well it all flowed together, and the such. i was looking for larger scaled words, high vocabulary, and also a touch of shakespeare to be found, which i did in this contest. please take a moment to read the winning poems and view why i chose them as the winners. i also gained enough points to hand out six HM's also. thank you to all for sharing your wonderful poetry with me. CONGRATS TO THE WINNERS:
GOLD: DEATH TAKES A BRIDE for its amazing high quality in vocabulary.
SILVER: RUBIK DREAMS for its creativity, language, and skilled writing
BRONZE: Aye, Knight... slay yon dragons for its wonderful talent in shakespearean language.
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wonderful display of high tech vocabulary. this is the kind of poetry that the reader has to read many times to really grasp what the writer is really trying to say. truly proud of reading this entry in my contest. thank you so much for sharing. i see why you won the gold before.
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This was a lovely poem. I enjoyed the use of alliteration in the first line. That was a great way to start the poem. I also enjoyed the dark metaphors. This was very well written. Excellent details and imagery.
Thank you for entering. Best of luck in my contest.
- Andi
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ah, bless you - i found myself skipping across the words - perhaps that is my mind that cannot take them in. and then the end, i understood, and my viewpoint changed: i was not disappointed.
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WOW!
In Too Deep, your choice of phrasing and elaborate descriptions really bring this poem together! It has a strong conclusion and a vivid scene with it. Good luck in your contest!!
-chelsea
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amazing!
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