leave our heat
outside our doors
disregarding lust,
desire needs...
cooling
intense longing
extinguishing
the flame
proves
necessary
yet...
heartbreaking
oh, when we
touch
suggestions of
heaven
yet,
we must...
not
just a taste
so tempting
intrusive dreams
constantly
stir...
unwanted
arousal
you arouse
my desire
fill me
with fire
but a
gentleman
respects...
his Lady
admiring you
from afar
there’s too much
at stake
maybe in
our next life
we can...
open this
gate.
Author notes
This is a shared collaboration with Pure Thought
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Very Sensual
I usual dont like to much sensual stuff but this is so beautiful I loved it you didnt speak to much just enough to make me fall in love with it -
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Thanks for your wonderful comment. Delightfulmess makes it easy to collaborate with, as she is a wonderful poet.
Thnaks for stopping by and for taking the time to comment.
Buddy
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So wonderful
A soft sensual delight. Perhaps in another life. oh the wonders of sweet passion and the thrill of possibilities. Excellent my poet friend
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Just a beautiful collaboration....
You and Pure Thought did a wonderful job penning this. This is one genre that I hope to learn how to write, sooner or later. I love the format to this, having only a few words in each line. It really adds so much suspensful impact to the concept of "resisting temptation." Beautiful writing!!
Knight70
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Delightful
pardon me for using part of you name but thats just what this is. And yes there are some of us out there like that, where the atisfying our sexual desires take a back seat to matters more of the heart. Does that mean that the desires arent there... no way...but more that they will come when they are menat to come, and it will happen when it happens. I loved this and until that day arrives live in the moments that you have and make the most of them.
Evan
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Watching you with needy eyes and whisper in a husky voice. Oh how I want to take down right there. But not now must wait. Great write. I loved this one too. Give you 10 points
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Awesome love
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beautiful duet of writing...
what a wonderful song this would make too! I could see
Josh Groban and Celine Dion sing this each one seperately, and then together blending like a melody,
it is a song of the most temptuous siren call.
I guess..uh...this gave me a lot of imagery? lol
wonderful poem loved the reality woven into it, made
it humble and lonely and sensuous desires.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
GREAT GREAT JOB YOU TWO!
more please???
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Very soft and flows well!I love it! *maniac laughter*
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I read this three times, because it was so sensual, and I love the resisting of temptation! excellent write...
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excellent~
Very soft and sensual...
Love the flow...a very sensual write again sis
Best of luck in the contest....
Hugs
Susan~~~~
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NIce,
Love the way you detailed it out all in reality's form.. Stating true feelings, but realizing the risks..damn, don't ya just hate consequences..lol.. Wonderful flow, and wisdom abounds.. Nice pen you two, great read indeed! Thanks for sharing, Timothy~
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Excellent
It is almost like a form of short hand! Yet the message is very clear! I Will attempt this form in my next couple of writes.
"BOO"
hope I'm sucessful, we'll see!
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Thanks, BOO
It is easy to collaborate when your partner is a good poet. Thank you for the read and taking time to comment.
Buddy
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wooooow.
oooooh, the sound of lust & temptation...
I love it. I love how you wrote it, keeping the tempo quick and soft, and sensual all the time. It made me feel like I was right in the middle of these two ogling eachother! Very passionate, and a very well write between you and Pure Thought.
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Coeur,
Thank you for stopping by our words. Well yes, you are in the middle, could you move just a little left. lol We are thinking up another one soon.
Buddy
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wonderful write between the two of you. great job. I think this is so awesome. such a beautiful sensual write. great job.
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Excellent
Very powerful and thoughtful write. Great collaboration.
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Very lustful, but very veiled and tasteful. You walked the fine line between the two with perfect balance. You two should collaborate more often. Your pieces are things of beauty and grace to be admired and certainly to be envied. Sublime.
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whew...there is a lot of heat
to this piece... desire, longing, lust all conveyed and portrayed with such a sense of understanding... so real and emotional...
well done... one of the best collaborations that I have read thus far!
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Nicely woven.
A blended talent fest...
Easy flow... good form..
And feelings there abovw the norm.
A delight to read tonight.
Alan.
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