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The Perfect Winter Night

A cold winter night,
The snow was glistening.
Not a sound to be heard.
So beautiful,
So peaceful...

A cool breeze blew,
As I walked along.
Not going anywhere,
Just walking around.

I paused for a second,
It started to snow.
Adding thickness to the blanket
That covered the Earth.

The sky was getting lighter,
And birds started to sing,
So I continued to walk,
This time back home.

Such a beautiful night,
Now coming to an end.
As I draw near my house,
I take one last look.

What once was empty,
Now filled with people.
But I will never forget
That one quiet night,

When all was perfect.

Author notes

Winter is such a beautiful time...

yo yo yo wats happenin

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  • Lady Michaella
    February 14

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    wow.. lovely imagery here.. very well written.. quite beautiful actually i loved reading this

    thanks for entering! and best of luck in the contest!!

    Your Co-Judge,
    -Lemon Bee-
    xx


  • DancingRed
    September 22, 2007

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    Your descriptions are nice & serene, but I feel they could have been more powerful
    For example instead of saying something fairly simple like "The sky was getting lighter", you could try using metaphor and other poetic devices.

    This piece looks quite structured, and I feel it would read more smoothly if the lines were groups in threes rather than quatrains.

    You are right about winter though; it is very beautiful, but it doesn't even snow here.

    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


  • Plastic Dreams
    September 1, 2007

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    adding thickness to the blanket, that covered the earth.


    gorgeous image.

    this is a very tranquil piece. much enjoyed!! :


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    What once was empty,
    Now filled with people.
    But I will never forget
    That one quiet night,

    When all was perfect.

    all we need is only one night to remember for life


  • Swan song gold member
    July 21, 2007
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    Very delightful


  • prettyktm
    July 19, 2007

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    WINTER is my fave season. Me living in India in Bombay city. Where there is hardly any winter time. So just imagine how I fantasy about WINTER. I love snow and the chill air. Thanks for sharing this work on Winter with all of us.

    All the best in the contest.
    Take care;
    Pretty.

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