Waiting for darkness to fall
Only capable of reaching in your dreams
Where everything falls apart
I've finally arrived
Everything is falling apart
Just like everyone said it would
Flying high
Just so I can see you
Flying high
I'm now outside your window
I just want to be with you
To see you breathe
I can't fall asleep
I don't want to miss you
I want to be able to hear you
Calling out for me
Flying high
I can see you clearly
Flying high
I only know you
I only want it to be
Just you and me
You're the only one for me
You're everything I know
And all I ever want to know
Author notes
-missjilleen
This is what I think of when I hear that song. Hope its ok
A contest entry
- Niki FM by dream5111.
300 points, ended July 27, 2007, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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This is a very nice peom. My favorite lines are:
I just want to be with you
To see you breathe
I can't fall asleep
I don't want to miss you
I want to be able to hear you
Calling out for me
Thank you for your entry and best of luck to you. -
A fantastic poem of love and desire. The repetition works extremely well. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Chris.
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"Waiting for darkness to fall
Only capable of reaching in your dreams
Where everything falls apart" is my favorite part good luck -
Bursting with perfection!
This poem is Fabulous! i absolutly LOVE IT! poems like these don't come around so often,and i love seeing them when i can;;;;You're extremmely talented.i love these lines:
Flying high
Just so I can see you
Flying high
I'm now outside your window
I just want to be with you
To see you breathe
I can't fall asleep
I don't want to miss you
I want to be able to hear you
Calling out for me
Flying high
I can see you clearly
This poem is just bursting with perfection,i can't believe it's not noticed very often.That's strange.you should messgae people to look at your poem,they'd probably be amazed!!!*
-R.A.*
P.S. good luck with your contest!
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Thanks
I'm glad tha tyou like it. I don't really want to message people to see my work. If they want to read it, they'll read it, if not, oh well. I just write because it's something fun to do. Plus, i really don't know anyone who would want to read something like this, but thanks anyways.
-missjilleen
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