Kryssi and Missy are walking home from school,
dragging a jump rope behind them.
The bright red handle was bouncing up and down,
catching the attention of a young kitten.
The kitten was playful chasing the jump rope,
she would jump to catch the bouncing handle.
The girls decided to coax her along,
to see how far the kitten would follow.
The kitten began to notice other things to do.
The kitten's head moved up and down and side to side
as she watched a jumping grasshopper jump all around.
The kitten started rolling all around,
rubbing the back of her neck on the ground,
because a butterfly, was playing a game of tag,
and kept touching the back of the kitten's neck.
Missy held the jump rope handle high in the air,
the kitten grabbed the handle, and used it as a swing.
Forward and back, forward and back,
high above the ground.
Kryssi said,"lets name her fluffy,
she's so cuddly soft."
Missy agreed but, now the two girls argued.
"I saw Fluffy first, so I should hold her first,"
Kryssi said to Missy.
Missy said, "I'm older so I should hold her first."
Kryssi had a solution.
She pulled a quarter out of her jacket pocket.
Kryssi gave the quarter to Missy and said,
"you toss the coin and I'll call it."
Missy tossed the coin in the air
quickly Kryssi called heads.
Kryssi reached down, picking up her two-headed quarter,
and Fluffy at the same time.
Kryssi carried Fluffy all the way home.
When they reached the front porch,
Kryssi hid Fluffy under her jacket.
The girls ran into the house, looking all over,
making sure that no one was home.
Checking each room, until they were sure,
the coast was clear.
Finally, they went into the kitchen,
to fetch a bowl of milk for Fluffy.
Their mother was there washing dishes.
Yes, the girls were quite surprised.
Mother asked, "can I get you girls something?"
Kryssi said, "no it's okay we're all set."
Just then, Fluffy lifted her head out,
from beneath Kryssi's jacket.
Kryssi kept pushing Fluffy's head,
back down inside her jacket.
Kryssi was trying hard,
to think of what she would say,
if her mother saw Fluffy.
Of course at that exact moment,
mother asked.
"Now what do we have here?"
Kryssi was searching her mind for something to say,
then she quickly said, "look what followed me home."
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A contest entry
- Everyones Invited, Come in and see! by kelbornro.
1100 points, ended July 16, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for entering the contest. I understand this is for a children’s book so I understand the content, thank you for letting me know what audience you are targeting as that is very important. :-) I believe “jumprope” is two words, “jump rope”
“Her head moved with a jumping grasshopper,
up high and side to side.” The wording on this seems a bit confusing. For a children’s story you want to keep the images clear and able to be pictured in one’s head.
This happens a few times throughout the piece when you describe what is going on, the imagery isn’t as understandable as it should be, in my opinion. You may want to tighten that up a bit. I got confused exactly what the butterfly and grasshopper was actually doing.
Also, I guess I am being too stereotypical but the ending of children’s stories usually end with some sort of theme or lesson. I am not sure the ending is as concrete yet.
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This is wonderfully written,the days of children and what they can come up with is amazing.This was sweet and innocent just like the little ones in life.A real treat and a great blessing to have read...
Blessings
~Cheryl~
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Aww, sweet. this is a really nice poem and it really makes a wonderful tale. the idea was a tale as a poem, but i never specified oh well. a wonderful story, with a wonderful ending, but perhaps you could tell me what message you are trying to give because i couldnt find one loved the tale though and it works for a childrens tale.
thankyou for your briliant entry. Kelbornro
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