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Sweet Taste

The only reason I`m writing this
Is to talk about your cute clitoris
To let all the other lesbians know
About your nice vagina down below
We were only friends at the start
But soon my dear, you stole my heart
Head over heels in love, with you I fell
It didn`t seem right to have sex with a girl
Seeing you there released my desires
And in my loins started the hot fires
It really was such perfect bliss
When you gave to me, that first kiss
You were the first lesbian I had met
But that soft kiss made me so wet
I had no idea what I was meant to say
Only hoped we would go all the way
Running your tongue down around my neck
Fuck, honey I was becoming a nervous wreck
When you sucked my nipples I began to sweat
How much better could this possibly get?
Past my navel, down to my inner thighs
So loud I was getting, with lustful sighs
Just then I bucked as if having a fit
Sweetheart, you were sucking on my clit
Slowly you licked my tight, shaven twat
Eat it all I thought, please eat the lot
Then you showed me all of your loving skills
You made me cum, not once but in multiples
The best orgasm sweetheart, I`d ever had
My turn to eat you now, I was ever so glad
You lying there naked was an awesome sight
I was new at this, I hoped I`d get it right
"Relax" you said, "take it nice and casually"
"Go slow and gentle, it will come naturally"
First I touched your pussy with  a shaking finger
I got closer, the sweet smell of it began to linger 
I could wait no longer so with no time to waste
I slipped in my tongue and what a great taste
So warm and wet it was and so very, very sweet
Eating your pussy was fantastic, couldn`t be beat
I sucked on your erect clit for all I was worth
Having no idea that I could make you squirt
Had I done it right?  hoped I wasn`t a disgrace
You assured me I did, as you wiped cum from my face
We rolled over, in each others arms we would sleep
This memory I would treasure and forever  keep
Tomorrow, unfortunately off home we will go
Certainly hope our husbands wont ever know
 
 

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  • longhorns-fan
    November 22
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    wow. this was intense and filled with some strong imagery and parts of it were arousing.


    • goat1826
      November 23
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      Gee Whiz
      sounds like it excited you
      glad you approve


  • CentrifugalCorpse
    June 11
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    Wow, what a twist at the end!
    As a gay guy, this doesn't really "get me going", but I can definitely feel the emotion; nicely written. The rhyme scheme seemed slightly awkward at some points though.

    I just request you put your AP name in your author's notes as the rules said.

    Thanks for sharing this piece and good luck!


    • goat1826
      June 12
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      Sorry that you are a gay guy
      Most gay women enjoyed it


      • CentrifugalCorpse
        June 12
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        Oh, it's ok.
        It's a good write, i enjoyed reading it; I just wasn't aroused by it, that's all.


  • WillAlwaysLove silver member
    January 8

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    Hot, Hot, Hot. Nice imagery, felt like I was there.....wish I was there! LOL Loved the poem, style and words. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • butchbec
    January 23, 2008

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    This is really really good, and very hot, but the forced rhyming did distract me from what u were saying! maybe u could touch it up a bit? but i do really like it, it says all the right things
    Bec

  • Alpha-Q
    September 15, 2007
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    I cannot believe I did not comment on this. Please understand this is my alter ego and I spend most of my time as another on AP, so things slip through the cracks. This is very hawt. I like it very much. Thanks for entering my contest. It must have been entered late... I admit I hurriedly judged the contest due to internet access restraints at the time.


  • SinningSaint
    September 12, 2007

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    great!

    I loved how well you illustrated a first time lesbian. your imagery as very vivd, and I liked how you were able to make the pice dirty, but still very poetic. thank you so much for enterig!


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    September 9, 2007
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    this was fucken delicious dammit i love how you delivered a story of a first time moment i think you did a great job


  • Floorboards
    August 25, 2007
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    Excellent content, flow a bit dodgy though, congrats on the gold,
    floorboards.


  • lesbian-in-love
    August 24, 2007

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    WOW!!! Shocking twist at the end. I loved it!!! My hearting pounded as I read through each line. Good luck in my contest. I know you will do well.


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    August 15, 2007

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    haha! last line was funny! Never expected the two hot ladies here to have hubbies!
    Excellent story within a poem. Wicked description and rhyme!

    Keep on writing, and good luck in the only contest that has not ended
    Nooni


  • Danna Hobart
    August 14, 2007

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    I have nothing against erotica, but I really wasn't looking for any when I posted this contest. Maybe I should have put that in the contest rules, but it just didn't cross my mind.

    As far as the poem goes, I am just going to be honest. William Greenway said, " Images can communicate the unsayable, so show don’t tell." This poem tells all and shows nothing. These lines are so tacky that they are comical:

    I sucked on your erect clit, for all I was worth
    I had no idea, that I could make you squirt
    Had I done it right, hoped I wasn`t a disgrace
    You assured me, I did, as you wiped cum off my face

    If you are going to write erotica, do it right. Show the reader you bare bodies braided in sinuous motion. Show us how your lips trace the curves of her body, etc...


  • glispa
    August 13, 2007
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    damn it makes you miss girls ....

  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    July 23, 2007

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    i can appreciate heted sex as what i just read this was delicious and tasty and a nice orgasim to read dear you have my heart pounding with this great write ~ lady enthralling ~


  • JoyfulWriter
    July 16, 2007

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    Very erotic and steamy scenes....great job with this contest entry....keep up the good work...smiles, Terry


  • sheltered
    July 15, 2007

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    While I really appreciated the graphic nature of this and admit to being a little turned on I did find the rhyme forced in places and almosed laughed a couple times at the quirkyness of it. A pretty decent job though.


  • Snakehips Pete
    July 14, 2007

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    This poem says a lot for the sex skills of some men. No wife (or mistress) of mine ever needed lesbian love - they were all hugely enamoured of my incredible butchness. They came more regularly than tube trains.

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