she is passionate about words,
holds the weight of them
in the palm of her right hand,
raises them to tongue flavours
with an elephantine appetite
for liberally laced expression,
lays herself naked,
alternately dressing
& undressing,
strip-teasing thoughts
trailed with a come-hither look
& an open invitation
to appreciate the foreplay involved,
she is a stylist,
fashioning the fabric
of love, lust, life,
draping death with dignity
met with dignity,
unlike unfulfilling sex,
there is no ceiling
on the imagination...
A contest entry
- PitBull on a HatBox by NurseChilly.
1800 points, ended August 1, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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very nice- thanks for entering the contest
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Yvette you got me hooked hun... there's some spacing problems aftet love, lust, life.. lololol... seems a little cramped up..
enjoyed this one a bunch
many thanks for entering our contest
G.x
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Thanks for the heads up re the spacing,have fixed it now
You were right,it was so tight couldn't have got a rizla between them
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much better....
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"she is a stylist,
fashioning the fabric
of love,lust,life,"
Wonderful...
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Yup..I agree with Zayra, a very stunning piece here hon!
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I think is one of my favorites from you Yvette.
Very well done...good luck in the contest.
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There is such beauty in the said sadness of your lines, mixed with rightful vindication, indignation, nectar dropping from a mysterious voice.
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... nice
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You create a want to learn more in the mind of the reader and we do that with every carefully penned word hun, you have excelled yourself yet again!
Karen
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amazing... the descriptions really
enables me to picture this mental process with more clarity... incredible use of metaphor... a rather astute observation and adept explanation... I love the symbolism and the reasoning... this piece is inspiring in a new and unusual way... it certainly provokes thought...
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Aah yes, she is passionate about words and she knows how to apply and smooth it until it becomes a poem like this one. Wonderful poetry - and I so loved that last stanza - gorgeous!
~ Nicolette
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love the anologies of words/eating/sex!
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very well done, creative use of imagery, the word choices i think are the best part here, very expressive and the narration is strong and interesting; a very well wriiten poem...PK
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Loved the last stanza and the last line summed it up well ... there truly is no limit on imagination ... well done - I enjoyed this one
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I like this cleverly-worded and well-structured piece.
Some really good lines and your use of alliteration is apt. Best of luck.
Bill
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I liked this a lot and shall applaud. I shall also send you a gift of 100 points which you may do with as you wish..... promote, institite a contest, bugger me, I don't care!
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