I am a moaning distressed specter
drifting aimlessly
throughout grim ruins
my sullied soul has become
lifeless, like a withered dead fly
in the bottom of a dusty window
rarely opened.
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I usually dont comment on short poems,but
since you asked I guess I'l try.
Your words have alott of depth && I enjoyed
the descriptions--
"sullied soul"
"distressed specter "
"grim ruins "
Good job is all I can really say. -
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Thank you, I really appreciate it and I shall return the favor.
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Very well written, wonderful word choice!
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I like this one, the phrase grim ruins is really nice...
great entry, thanks...
al
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