Charged particles splitting the night like a gatling gun
Shadows of body in motion asp walls design
Stripped of restraint and inhibitions, I reach for you
Scents ionized, infiltrate my nose
You become the very air that I breathe
Taking your tongue as if my personal candy
Electric sliding from lip to tonsil
Your tangerine lips are like tropical ale
My lips discover blueberry cheeks
Panting and exhaling, brown painted peaks rise
Tasting the raspberry of your neck
The ebony night unleashes its whip
Streaking across the heave of your storm
Indulging in your chocolates
Lemon frost only found in your valley
Creates a river against buds
Fingers savoring dangerous taffy curves
Inhibitions released in slow motion
Beast meets beauty in wild of storm
Picking strawberry paints in summer’s rain
Belly rings around roses propped against flutters
Rising heated abs seducing cheek
Flavors of citrus teasing tongue
Restless anticipations of cherry paint
Blowing out flickers once alit in hues
Darkness begins a mystery, and moans
Pierce the night
In a list
A contest entry
- Excite me~ In two ways by Whispered Devotions.
600 points, ended July 31, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Honorable winner
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850 points, ended December 8, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable winner
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Very tantalizing indeed. It drew me into the sensuality. Well phrased and wonderful piece. Thank you for your entry!
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Your use of imagery is amasing, you took me on a slow and beautiful ride.
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great stuff!!
erotic and deeply metaphorical!!!
vivid descriptive flow and good rhythm enthral the reader into the picture you paint before them.
well done!!!
good luck in the contest...
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Thank you for entering.
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you gave me a good idea what love tastes like. is this what love tastes like for you? if so i was moved ~ jewels ~
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That is a very good poem
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WOW! *catches breath suddenly* WOW! I am speechless, damn! I think I need a shower or something or another to cool me down now. This was beautifully erotic. Exactly what I LOVE. It was hot, subtle, and the imagery was still vivid. I am completely taken back by this. You definetly excited me!
Amy
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You paint an intense picture with this words, my favorite line was "your tangerine lips like tropical ale."
Well penned, my friend.
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