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Rainbow

     
        i      n      b
  a                        o

r                                w 
high up in the sky
rain refreshed air
               

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  • azure85 gold member
    July 30, 2007

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    A delightful rainbow of words within your haiku, and very cleverly written. The rainbow looks wonderful, thank you for your entry.


  • NoWayJo
    July 22, 2007
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    Really great job of formatting the first line of this haiku to resemble a rainbow Bill!  Now if you were a Gold Member, you could actually colorize the letters, just like this:

     

            i      n      b
      a                        o

    r                                w

     

    Lovely haiku and refreshing read!  Best wishes to you in the contest!

     

    Jo 


  • Pollycheck
    July 21, 2007

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    Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.

    i n b
    a o

    r w

    delight high in the sky
    rain refreshed air

    I like the concept and the form of this haiku. Do you really thinkthat you need the word "delight" in the haiku? How do you think it sounds without it? I think by dropping it, it makes less a statement and more an image.


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 17, 2007

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    This was creative, unique and fabulous all at once! Excellent work. This is inspiring me to try one of these shape poetry forms! Clever idea! ~tia


  • intanglio2ring
    July 14, 2007

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    Very Good!

    Wonderful effect of spacing to create your rainbow haiku!
    Good Luck in the contest!
    Tang

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