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Rearview Mirror Revelations ~ Prt. 1. .

And she comes into this world,
thinking she has fractured your well being..
She ain't shyt.
Un-up, on this.
And you exhale, within a grin of course,
wondering why she doesn't do the world a favor and ~
kill herself.
Save the "claimed" the trouble.
By offing it, you've flipped the switch,
eternal spotlight shatters until you are gone
ashes to ashes, dust to dust then, bone.
My mistakes are plentiful and fade within the shade of your "poetaster" forrest
choked back, in filthy underbrush
just, hush.
"Let all the earth fall silent before" ~ you.
And you bathe, god-like in your bullshyt
thinking clean within a grimy mind.
My savior complex should be left alone
as I hold a billion volt thunderbolt for the masses
now, I dare you, defecate on THAT microphone!
You ain't shyt
"Public be you, private see you
in this wicked wicked world."
Pretenses of sistahood, you slipped
fell and regurgitated lie into yourself gurl!
Toxically lethal, unto yourself gurl!
Why don't 'chya wise up & cease yourself ~ gurl?!
Reign don't come for free & nobody takes token rule anymore
Just because you can spell, doesn't make it so.
Just - you know, just - go.
And when I rise in the east again
and - and set in the north
I'll let you in on the cosmic secret that's the root of the root, the plant of the plant, the bud of the bud
huh?
I'll shine a little your way so you won't have to fade pale, when your harvester comes ~
huh?
. .And she leaves this world mistaken,
she has fractured your well being. . .



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  • ellipsist
    July 14, 2007

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    damn that is a powerful write

    the bare bones of emotion exposed and I love the way it is worded (it was read aloud in my head) certainly very different from most of what I have read recently and would consider poetic... this breaks the mold...

    the ending sticks, it stings... it's very poignant...

    this is WELL worth the read... I am intrigued, I certainly have to check out more of your work now...


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    ~ Black Eye Punch ~

    DO NOT RATE THE STARS WHO EVER THIS IS OK! this was a black eye punch which means it was well delivered and i love it to death the drive in this piece is a great fuel burner love it good luck in striking gold.